In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should be required to step down after five years.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The policy, people in power in the majority of fields are required to step down after five years provides a view that I strongly agree with but the absolute nature in the second half of the statement is something I do not support. although it is true that most people abuse power when given too much control over it one should consider the deeds done by the person over the course of his tenure to further determine if he is capable to serve longer.
As the policy is over a vast area group of individuals implementation of such a policy would require consideration of several persons. considering the position of a ceo of a business who has single handedly managed to bring the business to a multi-billion dollar company in the span of 5 years, it would be highly illogical to ask him to step down immediately after 5 years. The amount of hard work the individual has put in would be definitely visible amongst his colleagues and the general consensus by the company employees would be to have in on-board for the near future. this would definitely help in improving the general state of affairs in the company. though this is an ideal case, such might not happen in real life, it could be possible that the reason for the improvement of the business was due to a different individual who was shining in the limelight. In such a scenario it would be of the employees views that the ceo should move away from his position of power and allow the next person in.Thus even though the policy if implemented would consider the case of people in power being correct individuals, it doesn't account the enormity(of the decision) and complications that would arise as to who should be the next in power.
In the case of education, a rapidly growing field with technological and other advancements very often, it makes sense that there should be quick changes in administrative privileges to better utilise their current knowledge in positions of power. there have been numerous studies to show that the ability of a person to learn declines gradually past their twenties therefore people if chosen suitably during the prime of their times in the educational field might a better individual in their position. though this sounds perfectly fine at first glance this may not be feasible in implementing. it is well known that people gather knowledge over the span of several decades of their lifetime and positions of power though susceptible to misuse requires great strength and experience in all walks of life which can only be acquired over several years of experience. Thus in the education sector implementation of the above said policy might be helpful in keeping up with the pace of the sector, consideration of the position of the institute and how it wishes to be grown should be taken in to account prior to implementation.
I believe that although the policy has good intentions of allowing the correct people to be in power and has taken in to account the typical misuse of power by individuals, further study in each of the specific domains the policy is going to be applied to should be investigated. though the span of 5 years is sufficient time for people to express their views and carry out amazing work, at the end of their tenure a board of people and or a vote of individuals of the organisation would result in a better holistic environment for the organisation
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...tatement is something I do not support. although it is true that most people abuse power...
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...ne if he is capable to serve longer. As the policy is over a vast area group of...
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...quire consideration of several persons. considering the position of a ceo of a business who...
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... visible amongst his colleagues and the general consensus by the company employees would be to ha...
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...o be applied to should be investigated. though the span of 5 years is sufficient time ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 114.0 58.6224719101 194% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2790.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 588.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74489795918 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76348351379 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464285714286 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 895.5 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.2088329469 60.3974514979 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 186.0 118.986275619 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.2 23.4991977007 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223485748976 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783628517659 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474717110406 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140485414324 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0110137717779 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 14.1392134831 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.