In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
“Achievements follow endeavour”. It means unless someone venture into a field, the pinnacle is not certain. Therefore, there must be a diligence and perseverance in pursuing a venture. The prompt asserts that excited by past achievements in a field one can only make appreciable contribution in that field. In my opinion, I would strongly agree with this view and would further validate that past achievements instil the mood of courage, resourcefulness and ability to take initiative to make a significant contribution. The reasons justifying my view are presented in the following paragraphs.
First, in sports such as cricket, past achievements infused the vigour in most Indian citizen and some of them made huge difference how it pursued by others. For example, the no. 1 batsman in the world, Mr. Virat has said on many occasion like on TV interviews and chat shows that it is the past achievement of Mr. Tendulkar that urged him to pursue cricket and even do more what he had. Another example is, the no. 1 bowler, Mr. Bumrah has also confirmed in his speech about what inspired him to pursue bowling instead of batting that the past achievements of Mr. Wasim goad him to parallel him. Both the examples prove that past achievements of cricketers influenced younger generation and so, they made their name in the field. It matters because what has been done in the past has a bearing on current time.
Second, the field of education and research also follows the same pattern as mentioned in above paragraphs. For instance, the achievements of Mr. Raghu have realised because he was himself moved by Mr. Keynes’ focus on finance and economics. He made his name by predicting the worst financial crisis by stepping into the shoes of Mr. Keynes as confirmed by Mr. Raghu on CNN. Further, the achievement of Mr. Viral who became youngest deputy governor in India had entrenched his position by following what has been achieved by Mr. Famma and Mr. French. Mr. Viral was flattened by how these two inquisitive minds used the theory of mathematics in finance and Mr. Viral used same principle and developed a theory for systemic risks for banks in India. Both the instance had showed that past laurels brought in praise and acclaim for the current practitioner. It is significant since the field of research can make important contribution if it had realised its impact in the past.
Third, the field of business, innovation and the ability to take initiative and risk fall in the same road leading up to success. For example, the world today is being run on computers and it has reached to this stage just because the founder of Microsoft was greatly influenced by the founders of IBM. He said while speaking to journalists at World Economic Forum that if IBM can change the world with its super computer then why not a computer having smaller size bring change in the society. Further, the inspiring story of Mr. Steve is known worldwide and his speeches at college convocation confirmed that how he hounded his desire to develop and innovate something new which would involve technology but would be portable and would also make a landmark as did by computers founded by Microsoft. And we know that’s a history and today we have an access to world largest smart phone, i.e. Apple. Both the cases had showed that earlier success made possible further innovation and development. It is appreciable because what we are using today at mass scale was founded and became handier because of its earlier success.
Of course some may argue that past achievements are not required in order make or create something new and they may cite the example from some primitive times such as when Einstein or Newton developed theory of relativity where these men pursued something for which no precedents were there. However, one must know that they followed their respective fields and made history by not following any earlier examples but by following the past achievements of mathematics that could have been utilised in order to understand the physical world. Therefore, it showed that even their pursuits were results of some past achievements of some other but related field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 68, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'ventures'.
Suggestion: ventures
...ndeavour'. It means unless someone venture into a field, the pinnacle is not certa...
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Line 5, column 423, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'became the youngest'.
Suggestion: became the youngest
...rther, the achievement of Mr. Viral who became youngest deputy governor in India had entrenched...
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Line 7, column 854, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...that's a history and today we have an access to world largest smart phone, i.e. Appl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, while, for example, for instance, of course, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 58.6224719101 171% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3500.0 2235.4752809 157% => OK
No of words: 703.0 442.535393258 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9786628734 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.14918898149 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77907516689 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 338.0 215.323595506 157% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48079658606 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1085.4 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7564542425 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.666666667 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4333333333 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63333333333 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180307313384 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049748757359 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536928343733 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112786905672 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555815422915 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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