In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement

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In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

In any field of endeavor, such as academic and business field, it is important to learn from past achievements within that field to make a significant contribution.

If someone wants to make a great contribution in any field of endeavor, he or she must lay a solid foundation by learning from the past achievements in that field. For example, in the academic field, Albert Einstein must first study and construe the classical mechanics theories like the laws of motion and the universal gravitation formulated by Sir Isaac Newton before he could develop the theory of relativity because Einstein thought that Newtonian mechanics could not reconcile the laws of classical mechanics with the laws of electromagnetic field. Similarly, in the business field, Bill Gates had learned computer programming for seven years and became an expert in this field before he founded Microsoft. Therefore, learning from past achievements could be a prerequisite for people to make great contributions in any field of endeavor.

However, learning from the past achievements does not equally mean being strongly influenced by past achievements. For instance, when all the computers in the world had only keyboards for users to type the commands and interact with the operating system, Apple introduced the Macintosh computer equipped not only with a keyboard but also with a mouse and it had a revolutionary graphical user interface. Therefore, people could simply use the mouse to click the icons on the computer screen instead of remembering the tedious programming language, which makes the Macintosh easier to use than any other computer worldwide. If Apple had been strongly influenced by past achievements in the computer industry and had followed the stereotyped standard established by its predecessors, it might have not been able to produce the Macintosh and revolutionize the entire computer industry. Hence, it is important that when learning from the past achievements, one should try to avoid the stereotyped mindset and not let the past achievements constrain his creativity and inspiration. The ability of keeping an open mind and thinking out of the box also plays an important role in the progress of making great achievements in any field of endeavor.

To sum up, learning from past achievements could be a prerequisite for one to make great contributions in any field of endeavor. However, when learning from the past achievements, one should try to avoid the stereotyped mindset and not let the past achievements constrain his creativity and inspiration. The ability of keeping an open mind and thinking out of the box also plays an important role in the progress of making great achievements in any field of endeavor.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, similarly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27752293578 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08765945292 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.417431192661 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.8740749719 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.357142857 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1428571429 23.4991977007 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 5.21951772744 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295825701309 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134876497716 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859290458074 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228334303298 0.150359130593 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538238757778 0.0667264976115 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 11.8971910112 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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