In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The given issue concerns quite complicated matter - is it possible to make significant contribution without being influenced by past achievements of that field? Certainly, there is no way except to agree with the statement, hence the answer is no, it is impossible. The whole human development is based on this tenet. Today world totally resulted from the past achievements of the humanity.
There is no doubt that any considerable contribution is made by people, who were influenced achievements of the past. For example, the Internet is one of the greatest inventions of the last time. However, it could be extremely difficult to invent such thing without past experience in the communication field. It is hardly believable that without Bell's invention of the phone, the Internet could be made. The Bell's invention allowed people to think that vast spaces are not obstacles on the way of communication. This idea emerged the great expand of this realm of human knowledge. In this regard, the Internet is like a paragon of this idea that of the total connection regardless long distances. Consequently, this example approves the given statement.
The given issue is reasonable in the medical realm too. The humanity suffered from horrible diseases long time and tried to cope with it. This struggle provided enormous experience in medical sphere.
Using this base of knowledge today medical scientists push forward the development of the medicine. The innovative drugs and methods of therapy are based on previous experience and knowledge. For example, one of the progressive spheres is molecular-machines. It is more like magic, but it is true. It is unbelievable small machines, which may deliver drugs precisely to the aim. These things will seriously help with the oncological diseases. It would be absolutely impossible without the past achievements in these realms.
Probably, there is one realm of human activity where the past achievements may not be so important is the art. In contrast, in order to be successful artist one often neglects the past achievements of previous epochs, for example, the impressionists. This group of artists neglected the previous methods and techniques, and finally they contributed a lot in the fine arts.
To sum up, the given statement is reasonable and true, because it approves the logic of the common sense, however, fine arts is the such realm there this rule may not work at all.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Need to argue more generally. not just some examples.
Suppose A: a significant contribution
B: past achievements
Now the topic asked whether A is influenced by B.
if we agree, then we need to ask some questions:
1. A and B has connections historically? yes. like: Bell phone -->Internet
2. A and B has connections geologically? Yes, like: a Nobel prize A in country x is related to B in country y
3. is there any partly connection, or other branches are in action too ? Yes, a little will affect. for example: impressionists may get ideas from other arts too, maybe not painting, but literature...
4. Internet even speeds up the connection between A and B. for sure...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 393 350
No. of Characters: 1983 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.452 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.046 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.919 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.115 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.899 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.263 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.438 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The given issue concerns quite complicat...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the past achievements of the humanity. There is no doubt that any considerable ...
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Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
... difficult to invent such thing without past experience in the communication field. It is hardl...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'in contrast', 'no doubt', 'it is true', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238095238095 0.240241500013 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.136054421769 0.157235817809 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106575963719 0.0880659088768 121% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0544217687075 0.0497285424764 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0249433106576 0.0444667217837 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.1179138322 0.12292977631 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0272108843537 0.0406280797675 67% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.0076741839 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0181405895692 0.030933414821 59% => OK
Particles: 0.00226757369615 0.0016655270985 136% => OK
Determiners: 0.133786848073 0.0997080785238 134% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015873015873 0.0249443105267 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00907029478458 0.0148568991511 61% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2451.0 2732.02544248 90% => OK
No of words: 394.0 452.878318584 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.22081218274 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335025380711 0.366273622748 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.291878172589 0.280924506359 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.225888324873 0.200843997647 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159898477157 0.132149295362 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0076741839 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 219.290929204 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51269035533 0.48968727796 105% => OK
Word variations: 56.3969686989 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.1538461538 23.380412469 65% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2110790387 59.4972553346 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2692307692 141.124799967 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1538461538 23.380412469 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 44.3416634127 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.77894736842 1.64882698954 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412109818918 0.391690518653 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116231875928 0.123202303941 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0760560414813 0.077325440228 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.531375863472 0.547984918172 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145125618498 0.149214159877 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155724880326 0.161403998019 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745084920432 0.0892212321368 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.41153429258 0.385218514788 107% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0909075666629 0.0692045440612 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270552519317 0.275328986314 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0749591592831 0.0653680567796 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.70907079646 185% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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