In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
While the true motivation to invest our time, concentrate in any work, understand its characteristics and then make significant contributions comes from past achievements and applications of the work in any field, it may also helpful to work raw and unexplored fields. For example, the emergence of new era in scientific research often takes place as scientists start exploring new fields. To exemplify, fields like Machine learning and Artificial intelligence are like aliens to researchers probably before a century and currently these fields are being researched and developed by scientists all over the globe. Without emergence of such fields handling big data and making it available to people throughout the globe might be impossible. The products of the big, giant companies like Google, Microsoft, Apple are based on techniques of these fields. In any field, there is no past achievement before the first achievement and first achievement definitely need significant contribution, so the emergence of many new fields like mentioned above says that it is not impossible to contribute significantly in the fields which have no past achievements.
Firstly, the aim if any research like scientific research is to find new techniques for the development of human race. In most of the scientific researches there are no past successes for the application of new techniques, even though the perseverance, patience, constant hard work scientists make new inventions. Like in the field of chemical engineering, there is recent successful production of Bio-diesel from plant and animal wastes. The production of these fuels from renewable sources like plant and animal wastes is important currently because we are running out of fossil fuels. Despite the fact that it takes long time for the invention of such new fuels, researches tried and are successful at the least at lab scale. Many petroleum companies in like BPCL, HPCL employ the successful techniques at big, commercial scale but, they also encourage their researches to find out these alternate fuels for fossil fuels to ensure their company’s longevity. The inventions of new techniques which use other renewable energy sources like solar energy, wind energy, geothermal energy also suggests the amount of contributions made to these fields.
Secondly, despite of saying above, it is human tendency to be inspired by the achievements in the past in any field and these achievements also boosts confidence in them. For example, children of India these days mostly study medical sciences or engineering or civil services because they has been seeing their elders getting success in these fields. They are also encouraged by their parents to pursue their careers in these fields to have a secure job. Only quite a few children tend towards fields like Agricultural sciences, law because they have seen more failures than successes. But, as only specific are fields are pursued and explored, this may make other fields underdeveloped and we may not be able to use, get benefits from these untouched fields. Like India also requires Farmers, Lawyers students should also take contributing in these fields as their career objectives.
To conclude, it is obvious that the fields with successful past achievements are often pursued, but to achieve the goal of enhancing human comforts, proving themselves and in process of broadening their perspective many researchers, scientists tend to make innovations in under developed fields. It is also evident that while pursuing careers in the fields that have past achievements, researchers can apply techniques of these fields in underdeveloped fields. For example application of many modern engineering equipment, tools, pesticides in Framing has been increasing its productivity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'contributions'' or 'contribution's'?
Suggestion: contributions'; contribution's
...aracteristics and then make significant contributions comes from past achievements and applic...
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...y field, it may also helpful to work raw and unexplored fields. For example, the ...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
... significantly in the fields which have no past achievements. Firstly, the aim i...
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Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
... of the scientific researches there are no past successes for the application of n...
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...ineering or civil services because they has been seeing their elders getting succes...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 99.0 58.6224719101 169% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3206.0 2235.4752809 143% => OK
No of words: 589.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44312393888 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00972373071 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483870967742 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 987.3 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0116830639 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.727272727 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7727272727 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208525085615 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688797811216 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077308792774 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147161443998 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816230263879 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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