In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Knowledge is power, and the more you know the better. Our modern day knowledge of the sciences and the arts is an accumulation of centuries worth of information. However, prior knowledge is not necessary for human curiosity and innovation. While most of human’s discoveries and innovations have been based off prior human creations and ideas, it is not always the case. Creative constraints, such as innacesibility to knowledge, can, in some cases, produce equally magnificent results as well. However, as our technology and understanding of science becomes more and more advanced, it becomes harder and harder to make new significant contributions in a field without prior knowledge.
Intellectual curisoity is a powerful driving factor. It was what drove Ramunjan, a famous mathematician from India, to make significant contributions to his field. As an uneducated boy from a rural town in India, he had little to no access to books and education. However, he began experimenting with numbers and counting and reinvented many established mathematical formulas that, unbeknowest to him, had already been invented. Beyond that, Ramunjan came up with many new theories and postulates in mathematics regarding integers and counting. His work was so pivotal to the field that Oxford welcomed him into their institution with a fullride scholarship. Unskilled and untrained artists all around the world have been able to make beautiful creations without any prior knowledge of their craft. A self composed piece played by a street violinist in no less magnificent that a student out of Juliard playing Bach or Mozart. Sometimes passion alone can drive humans to success, prior knowlede is not always a necessary prerequistite.
However, after centuries of human existance, most of the simple or easy things have already been invented or thought of—especially in scientific fields. Bohr’s model of an atom was revolutionary, it was one of the first glimpes into what a structure of an atom could look like. It posited that atoms were made up of both positive and negative charges. This informationw as vital to rutherfords experimentation and understanding of physics that allowed him to implement his gold foil experiement—one that ultimatley led to an even more accurate representation of an atomic structure. Physicists have been building off their predeccors works for decades. Martin Luther King Jr., a monumental civil rights activist, modeled many of his tactics and strategies off Mahatma Gandhi, another civil rights activist. Using Gandhi’s methods of peaceful protest and civil disobediance, proven to have worked, MLK was able to achieve his goal of racial equality in the United States. Prior knowledge has become vital to success in modern days fields such as science and history. The more you know, the better your chances of contributing significantly to your field.
While knowledge’s relationship with humans has been complex, it is becoming clear that it is necessary for human success. While there have been cases of true ingenuity without the help of textbook knowledge, the cases have been far and few. More often than not, significant discoveries and innovation have been derivates of prior predescessors work. It is to be seen what will happen when the all the knowledge accumulated over human existance becomes too large for even the smartest human to comprehend. Who will be able to innovate or create beyond that?
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...ble to innovate or create beyond that?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, regarding, so, well, while, such as, you know, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2927.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37064220183 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.132112779 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550458715596 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 917.1 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.144881917 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.931034483 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7931034483 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.13793103448 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110563933668 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310291999746 0.0831039109588 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450548350359 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697112621162 0.150359130593 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195116603179 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.