The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In todays' world, the society depends on it's youth for bringing betterment or improvement in the society. So, young people need to be prepared in such a way, that they can be leaders in any field, like in any industry or in government or any other field, but they should be taught to make efforts to do things with cooperation and not competition. As we know, to achieve something, we need to make efforts like a team, not like rivals, competing to win something, because ultimately by doing competition we can achieve something personally, not for the society as a whole.
The approach of cooperation, not competition demands patience. For example, their are two people working for a company in software industry, both of them have their own teams, which they have to lead. One team has to create a database of users and the other team has to maintain that database. Now, here the two leaders need to show cooperation, as untill one team completes it work, the other team cannot start doing it's work. So, here patience is needed, if the other team keeps on annoying the first team, that give us work, this would lead to rivalry between the two teams, so both the teams need to maintain patience and do work in a collaborated way.
Cooperation always leads to good results, however, in certain situations competition produces better results. Perhaps, if we take into consideration the example of two giant companies providing internet services. They compete with each other to provide better services, and in doing so they try to provide more benefits to their customers, and in turn try to develop new technologies to provide better services, so this finally leads to the betterment of the society, as it is gaining something not losing anything. But, in leadership, we need to stay steadfast to the sense of cooperation as, the role of a leader is not to walk alone, but to involve everyone and lead the path to success.
Finally, it can be concluded that cooperating is better than competition when it comes to leadership, as leader alone cannot do anything, he has to cooperate with his team of people, or other leaders also. So, the best way to teach the youth the aspects of leadership is, they need to be instilled with a sense of cooperation, instead of competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77974683544 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74400951292 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488607594937 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.7537356594 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.857142857 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2142857143 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183987118022 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065441552874 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465971008461 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111915609851 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442928604886 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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