Teachers salaries should be based on their students academic performance Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to address the most compelling reaso

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Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

In today's world, it has become very important for each and every person to imbibe knowledge but every person has different potential to learn and grasp it, so that it can be used to improve the life of person in many ways. The above stated claim, "Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.", is not pragmatic. According to the claim, students' who perform well, the teachers' of those students' would receive more salary than teachers' whose students' does not perform well, this is clearly a biased approach. Based on the students' performance, how can somebody judge a teachers' ability to teach? All the students are not the same, each and every student has different mind, and ability to grasp knowledge.

A students' performance not only depends on how the teachers' are teaching, but also on whether the students' want to learn or not. For example, their are two students, who are being taught by a certain teacher. Now, when they are evaluated in a test, first student performs well and the second student performs very badly. So, this happened because the first student was academically intelligent than the second student, who does not want to study. This shows that a teachers' salary has no relation with the students' performance. No doubt, the teacher is responsible for a students' performance, but it is not solely teachers' responsibility, the student also needs to put effort to earn good marks.

Also, if a student is going to a private tution after school, he might perform well than other students in the school. For example, there are two classes A and B in a school with 10 students each, and two separate teachers' for each class. Students' of class A go to private tution, but students' of class B does not. So, students of class A perform well than class B students, this does not mean that the teacher of class B is not good, class A students are getting better practice from private tution also, so it would not be feasible to decide teachers' salaries based on their students' academic performance, as the students might be receiving extra knowledge from outside the school, this would lead to some teachers' getting benefit over the other teachers.

Finally, I would like to conclude, teachers' salaries should not be based on how their students' perform, as this would lead to differences in the teacher community, as some teachers' earning more than other. Teachers are the source of knowledge, creating differences between them by giving salaries according to students' performance, is not acceptable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 561, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...clearly a biased approach. Based on the students performance, how can somebody judge a t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 608, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...s performance, how can somebody judge a teachers ability to teach? All the students are ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 3, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
..., and ability to grasp knowledge. A students performance not only depends on how the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ents want to learn or not. For example, their are two students, who are being taught ...
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Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
...es not want to study. This shows that a teachers salary has no relation with the student...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...eachers salary has no relation with the students performance. No doubt, the teacher is r...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...doubt, the teacher is responsible for a students performance, but it is not solely teach...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...class B does not. So, students of class A perform well than class B students, this does n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, well, for example, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 429.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9696969697 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71469416151 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428904428904 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.7685225903 60.3974514979 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.411764706 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2352941176 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11764705882 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23550549759 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102691069373 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531755284707 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179054291617 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218893881552 0.0667264976115 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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