The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the memo from vice president of Quiot Manufacturing, it is stated that they have experienced on-the-job accidents increased by 30 percent during the past year in comparison to the nearby Panoply Industries plant, and the reason for this to happen is assumed to be due to the work shifts being one hour longer at the Quiot manufacturing than at the Panoply Industries plant, leading to tiredness and deprived sleep among the workers. So, to reduce the accidents and increase productivity, Quiot Manufacturing has decided to shorten each of the three work shifts by one hour, so that employees get the required amount of sleep. I would like to present some assumptions in regard of this situation.
Firstly, the reason for on-the-job accidents can also be due to some other factors apart from fatigue and sleep deprivation, like due to the carelessness of some of the employees'. Perhaps, their are many real world cases of accidents happening due to the minor fault or carelessness of the workers. So, instead of reducing the work shift by one hour, Quiot Manufacturing should look into the matter of why did the accident happened and do proper analysis of the reason for accidents, and take actions accordingly if it was due to the ignorance of the employees'.
Secondly, when comparing to Panoply Industries plant, it might be possible that they also had on-the-job accidents, but they tried to suppress the issues by some unethical methods, to save their plant from defamation. So it might not be valid to conclude, that due to the shorter work shift hours at Panoply Industries plant, they have less on-the-job accidents.
Also, it might be possible that the Panoply Indsutries plant face less on-the-job accidents as compared to Quiot Manfacturing not because of less work hours but due to more careful and attentive employees at Panoply Industries plant than the employees' of Quiot Manufacturing.
There can be one more possibility that fatigue and sleep deprivation are not due to more work hours, but due to less advanced machinery or less automated machines available at the Quiot Manufacturing than at the Panoply Industries plant, this leads to workers doing more amount of work as compared to workers at Panoply Industries plant, who have to do less work due to help of automated machinery which reduces their work to great extent.
Finally, I would like to conclude, that their are many other factors apart from the fatigueness and sleep deprivation which might need to be considered for evaluation before taking decision of reducing the work shifts by one hour, because it might lead to decreased productivity instead of increasing it.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2170 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.768 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.185 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.464 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.759 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...vation, like due to the carelessness of some of the employees. Perhaps, their are many real...
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Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ness of some of the employees. Perhaps, their are many real world cases of accidents ...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'happen'?
Suggestion: happen
...into the matter of why did the accident happened and do proper analysis of the reason fo...
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Line 11, column 41, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...Finally, I would like to conclude, that their are many other factors apart from the f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2226.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07061503417 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83756302995 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419134396355 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.8473053892 171% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.146129339 57.8364921388 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 202.363636364 119.503703932 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.9090909091 23.324526521 171% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 5.70786347227 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40869707499 0.218282227539 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166036238049 0.0743258471296 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138794733039 0.0701772020484 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228018565708 0.128457276422 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127180518653 0.0628817314937 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 14.3799401198 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.35 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.1389221557 158% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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