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The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.

"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

In the recommendation sent by the vice president of human resources at Climpson to the company's president, it is stated that, electronic monitoring of Internet use of the employees should be implemented in order to improve the productivity of employees, and to do so, a software will be installed to detect the employees' internet use on the company owned computers and the employees who are spending more time on personal or other activities like shopping or playing games instead of working will be identified and punished, this will result in preventing employees from wasting time and reducing the work hours spent for unnecessary things and it will also lead to improved work ethic at Climpson, which will ultimately improve the overall profits. I would like to present some of the plausible evidences against the recommendation.

Firstly, it may be possible that in taking such measures, the company might face bitter indignation from the employees who are diligently working, as they might feel offended, because they are not doing such unethical things, and are working with full heart for their company, and still the company is supervising them, this would result in good employees turning rebel, and would stop working with full potential with which they used to work before, and so the aim of company to make better work ethic and increased overall profit would not succeed.

Secondly, if the company tries to put an eye on the employees, than the employees would not like to work in such environment, where they are being supervised each and every second for how much work they have done, this would lead to work environment getting destroyed, and most of the employees would think to leave the company and join somewhere else. This would result in company losing good employees and the main aim of improving the overall profits might result in getting foundered.

Also, if the company puts electronic monitoring on their employees, the company would need to hire employees for monitoring the internet use also, the company would need to pay the monitoring employees, and also who will keep watch on the employees who are monitoring the other employees, they might as well waste time on shopping and other unnecessary activities, as they might have a impression that, we are the supervisors, nobody is eyeing on us, we can do whatever we want, and thus the hope of the company for fostering better work ethic would be destroyed.

So, while concluding I would like to suggest that, the company should provide a pleasant working environment to the employees rather than putting restrictions or supervising and punishing them, also they should be given a proper break time, in which they can do such recreational activities, and during the work hours they should work with full potential, and also the company should follow certain types of reward policies, like if a person works for like 12 hours a day, everyday for 1 month, he will be rewarded with bonus or something, this would lead to employees being more focused on their work rather than wasting their time around, in the greed for bonus.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...oftware will be installed to detect the employees internet use on the company owned compu...
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Line 1, column 775, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...verall profits. I would like to present some of the plausible evidences against the recomme...
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Line 7, column 385, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ecessary activities, as they might have a impression that, we are the supervisors...
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Line 9, column 474, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...a person works for like 12 hours a day, everyday for 1 month, he will be rewarded with b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 35.0 12.9520958084 270% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 11.1786427146 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2599.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 520.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99807692308 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66690696341 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430769230769 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 10.0 1.67365269461 597% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 74.0 22.8473053892 324% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 239.364464653 57.8364921388 414% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 371.285714286 119.503703932 311% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 74.2857142857 23.324526521 318% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.70786347227 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259275172528 0.218282227539 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12743437891 0.0743258471296 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10212126514 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162224434922 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0916064676303 0.0628817314937 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.3 14.3799401198 273% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 4.83 48.3550499002 10% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.0 12.197005988 254% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.9 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.04 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 12.3882235529 468% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 31.6 11.1389221557 284% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments