Young people should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for th

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Young people of todays' contemporary society will shape the future of the society they live in. But in recent trends, it is seen that social media has led to increased greed for fame and recognition, everybody wants it. So, the millenials should be encouraged to pursue achievable, long-term goals, rather than persuading them to seek transient fame and popularity. Their is nothing wrong in being famous, but you should be aware that it is not permanent, it is there for one moment, and the next moment it may be gone. But, the goals that are achieved by you will always accompany you till you exist.

Fame and recognition are like seasons of climate, summer, winter, and monsoon. As we know, any particular season does not stay permanent, they keep on changing. Same is the case for popularity, it keeps on coming and going, it is not static. But, it is not the same for the long-term goals, however, they are a bit difficult to achieve and takes long time, but after they are accomplished, they feel like rewards to you. Also, pursuing goals may bring fame and recognition, for example, if you decide that you will do something good for the society, perhaps by inventing medicines that are available at very low cost for the poor, than you might become a hero for the poors.

Young people are like clay, they can be moulded into any form you want. So, if we try to mould them to have goals in life, than it would be beneficial for them as well and for the society they live in. We should make them understand the importance of ambition in our life, that it provides us a direction to go in. Fame and popluarity, eventually leads to nothing, you achieve nothing after you become popular, but if you achieve your goals, than you achieve something for which you have made painstaking efforts.

So, it would be appropriate to say that goals are the navigating compass which helps you steer your life and, everybody should pursue or keep a goal to achieve, otherwise, one would be wandering around, having no direction to go in and ultimately, fall in to the traps of fame and recognition which would give him nothing.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
... to seek transient fame and popularity. Their is nothing wrong in being famous, but y...
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Line 7, column 324, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cognition which would give him nothing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65691489362 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51728828776 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507978723404 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.9388939639 60.3974514979 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.733333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364065578532 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116067246218 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0790546760652 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235661080733 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390454144311 0.0667264976115 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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