The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The author claims that the best way for a society to prepare its young poeple for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense cooperation, not competition. Indisputably, coopertaion is essential trait for leadership. Nevertheless, without the sense of competition between leaders, cooperation won't play a big role in their pursuit of career or dreams. Thus, I partially agree with the author and would argue that society prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of competition.

First of all, competition gives the sense to do better or achieve more in their career, either they have career in goverment, industry, or other fields like games. I would like to point out that the competition with maturity level motivates people to achieve something in their career. It is the reef quality that give better result for leaders in a short span of time if they want to achieve something or learn anything either from others or with their own. To illustrate, let us look at the example of young leaders in different parties of government. They do work with different party members in order to pass any bill or law. However, they are highly competitive with other party members also, so that they can grow their party and make name of their party in the eyes of people for their works.

Another compelling argument against author's claim is that people get fast results by sense of competition, as everyone wants to be winner or do things differntly. To illustrate, let us take an example of games, Olympic games, everyone wants to be winner so they have to be highly competitve with others in terms of game and win the game, to make history. Nevertheless, they have a sense of cooperation, they help each other to achieve their goals, as good leaders do.

Admittedly, semse of cooperation plays a crucial role. This is true especially when it comes to achieve something within company. If any company wants to thrive in their field then their employers should be cooperative in order to achieve anything in sort span of time. However, the above argument does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that society preparepeople with sensse of cooperation.

In conclusion, although coopertaion is essential trait to thrive in leadership, but it plays its best part after when people have sense of competition.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 399.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98245614035 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81317798755 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478696741855 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9270124171 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.444444444 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248949401789 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938516171993 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138506594594 0.0758088955206 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161609688589 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159563297174 0.0667264976115 239% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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