*The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.’ Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.”*
When talking about the way to cultivate the young generations' leadership, people's opinions vary. Some hold the belief that competition overshadows cooperation in this endeavour. Some think that cooperation, however, is actually crucial to leadership. As far as I am concerned, cooperation and competition are not necessarily mutually exclusive.
People clinging to competition may think teaching the young people cooperation will undermine their ability to survive in the complicated society. In their mind, many fields are actually kind of battlefields, where people fight for limited resources. And a sense of cooperation will inevitably weaken the absolution and thus jeopardize their survival and development. For instance, if two employees in a company are offered only one position, then cooperation will not help either one of them to get the position. On the other hand, people inclining to cooperation usually emphasize the complex of the socirty as well. They believe a united group constitutes various talents and this advantage can help the group of people survive and obtain more resources.
Even though the two groups consider a lot aspects on this issue, however, neither of them manages to mull over the problem comprehensively. The former ignores that individual's ability is limited especially compared various people with various qualities. If young people concentrate too much on competition, they will become complacent. Moreover, The latter overstates the ability of cooperation, which will, to some extent, hinder the comprehensive development of individuals. In this scenario, individuals are delegated to single task, which weaken their ability to encounter diversity of the society.
Last but not the least, I hold the belief that in order to prepare for the future, the young people should develop the sense of cooperation and competition simultaneously. There two senses are not mutually exclusive, which means they are adaptions for different situations. Therefore, young people should be taught when to cooperate and when to compete rather than adopting merely on policy. In addition, for different working situations, different choice should be utilized.
All in all, I subscribe to the view that young people should be equipped with the sense of competition and the sense of competition as the same time, which will enable them greater power to solve the problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...ng about the way to cultivate the young generations leadership, peoples opinions vary. Some...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...omprehensively. The former ignores that individuals ability is limited especially compared...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ores that individuals ability is limited especially compared various people with ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, kind of, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 368.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54347826087 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02435763931 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521739130435 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1380068803 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.0 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214926640745 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654204280466 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443484777099 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119151516403 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250436615116 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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