The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is bu instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The author asserts that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition. Though it is true that healthy competition can serve to enhance one's abilities and help one flourish under pressure, too much competition can prove to be counterproductive. On the other hand, cooperation with his/her peers can help instill qualities which can assist them in a professional setup. Thus, I firmly agree with the author on this assertion.
In today's generation, where everyone strives to be better, the environment in which students sustain has become extremely toxic, with everyone wanting to master every skill possible. This, in a professional set-up can prove to be counterproductive. For example, consider a group project of building a car wherein everyone is allotted one task as per their abilities. To accomplish this task, everyone has to make sure that they complete the task allotted to them properly. Now, if the team involved in the task tries to compete with his or her contemporaries in every possible aspect, say the person concerned with assembling the parts tries to compete with the one responsible for building the engine, all the attempts would end in futility thus leading to an overall wastage of time, energy and resources. If, however, each member contributes his part diligently while cooperating with his peers, it would bring out the best in each member and eventually have fruitful results.
Another example where cooperation plays a pivotal role is the ecosystem itself. We all are aware of the fact of how insects help in the process of pollination by transferring of the pollen grains from one flower to another. This is an extremely important phenomenon in the environment. Similarly, birds and animals who feed on fruits are responsible for the transportation of the seeds and help sustaining the environment. Thus, cooperation among various elements in a system is extremely important for the overall development of the system.
With the increasing demand of cooperation, we observe various educational institutions incorporating soft skills in their curriculum which include activities like group discussion and group projects. One gets to learn a lot in such ventures and also develops abilities to interact with people which is an extremely important quality. These ventures help people convey their ideas effectively. It serves as a platform where people can not only share ideas but also learn a lot from others by listening to their idealogies. If however, one tries to compete with his contemporaries, it would lead to feelings of envy and hostility which has a negative impact on not only the project but also the person bearing them.
Thus, to survive in a corporate environment, the skills of cooperation are extremely necessary as competition can turn out to have a negative impact on the team and have undesirable results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ealthy competition can serve to enhance ones abilities and help one flourish under p...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to sustain' or 'sustain'.
Suggestion: to sustain; sustain
...he transportation of the seeds and help sustaining the environment. Thus, cooperation amon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, still, thus, while, as to, for example, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2523.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21280991736 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04447249156 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506198347107 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 798.3 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0196965156 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.142857143 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0476190476 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197856332079 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628719563397 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167329181288 0.0758088955206 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106415237393 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131382504342 0.0667264976115 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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