The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The modern world has seen young minds take the position of leadership in different sectors of life, be it government , automobile industry or even the information technology industry. While the world challenge them to be competitive to stay as a leader, one must also consider the values of being cooperative and the benefits it brings. Individuals should be instilled with the values of being competitive and cooperative as these brings out the best from an individual.

To begin with, it is a universal fact that even though every human being is different from each other, one thing remains same: the nature of being competitive. While some people have a strong sense of competition, others wait for the time and circumstances to be competitive. For instance, preparing for an exam such as GRE requires an individual to be competitive. Exams such as this motivates students to do better than themselves. Similarly, sports motivates an individual to be competitive. Witnessing other players perform , an individual has a strong desire to perform better. However, values of cooperation is not among every individual. History has shown that there were tyrannical leaders who definitely had the sense of competition and no cooperation. For instance, Hitler was one of the most competitive leaders of his generation. He made sure that Germany rose from the ashes of world war 1. However, he lacked the most important value of cooperation that lead to the destruction of Germany and his subsequent death in 1945. therefore, one must instill the values of cooperation as every individual has a sense of competitiveness among them.

Secondly, Cooperation has enabled many organizations to run efficiently, be it governments or an agglomerate. Cooperation among people helps an individual to maintain a feel of well being among them and this results an organization to run efficiently. For instance, Abraham Lincoln was one such leaders who understood the values of being cooperative. While one might argue that he was predominant figure of the Civil War, Abraham Lincoln understood the values of the people working under his government. This enabled him to run the government efficiently and for a long duration. Similarly, within an organization a sense of cooperation helps individuals to bring out the ideas that may result in the success of the company. Activities such as brainstorming sessions tend to make an employee relaxed in a busy environment. This allows them to put forward their views on an issue. Cooperation is required for a company to stay front in the game.
While, some might argue that competitiveness allows many companies to stay a head of others, I consider that competitiveness and cooperation should work hand in hand as they compliment each other.

The modern world has seen young minds take the position of leadership in different sectors of life, be it government , automobile industry or even the information technology industry. While the world challenge them to be competitive to stay as a leader, one must also consider the values of being cooperative and the benefits it brings. Individuals should be instilled with the values of being competitive and cooperative as these brings out the best from an individual.

To conclude, the world challenges an individual to be competitive and cooperative. As stated above, every individual have a sense of competitveness among them. Therefore, a sense of cooperation is to be instilled among each individual. Competitiveness and cooperation compliment each other and bring out the best result out of an individual.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3022.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25565217391 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19718127853 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.384347826087 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 972.0 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.6909447324 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4375 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.96875 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113459966418 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394753501826 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035905858 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0676013165427 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294556962197 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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