"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Do luxuries and conveniences of of life restrict us from developing into a strong and independent individuals? Well, the speaker believes so and I would agree overaly. But I must concede that in some cases the luxuries can actually aid us to be independent as long as they don't become necessities.
Lets consider the impact of automobiles on our lives and in turn on our independence. Cars for example act as a means with the help of which people in remote areas can have access facilities such as universities, office which weren't otherwise viable to them.In such cases one could argue that the luxury is actually helping the individual to be more independent in some sense.Another example which comes to mind is mobile phones which helps to connect working couples separated far away and in some sense preserves their independent working nature.
But when our luxuries and conveniences become necessities, I would say, then it interferes with our independence as individuals.Take the case of mobile phones, which were intended for the purpose of communication but with the advancement of technology mobiles are no longer used just used for the purpose of communication.For example adolescents these days often get caught in the vicious web of gaming and waste their useful time.When students are given assignments from school they do not think enough about the problems by themselves and often resort to internet for the answers.These conveniences also sometimes minimize effective family interactions which are sometimes required for mental well being .
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...r lives and in turn on our inpependence.Cars for example act as a means with the hel...
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...sometimes required for mental well being .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, then, well, for example, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 245.0 442.535393258 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37959183673 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21740712982 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632653061224 0.4932671777 128% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 61.0 23.0359550562 265% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 247.23318952 60.3974514979 409% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 329.5 118.986275619 277% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 61.25 23.4991977007 261% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.0 5.21951772744 364% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128900504924 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582740444633 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583350376522 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077698725951 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550275308694 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.5 14.1392134831 244% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 1.1 48.8420337079 2% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 18.2 7.92365168539 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 12.1743820225 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.81 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.11 8.38706741573 132% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 11.8971910112 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 26.4 11.2143820225 235% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.