The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The competition always was the main thing of the progress. Historically, there was a society, which had the same ideas. However, after a while, the new ideas arise in the human minds. As a result, it leads to the creation of companies either fabrics. Which leads, to the creation of the competition. Competition makes progress. Even, in the last 20 years, the MacBook’s and Iphones became themselves, only because of the Steve Jobs and Bill Gates competition. Nevertheless, the competition can be valuable, only in good manner. I mean, that creation of the new ideas which leads to the progress that is the real competition. While, ideas stilling is absolutely unacceptable. In the same time, regarding the contribution it teaches to be patient and friendly person, as well as to be team oriented. However, as it used to be and as it exists, if you want to get a high result, you need to be hungry, you need to be angry in the good sense of the word. For example, the people can’t always be in zone of the comfort. They must get out from the frames. Furthermore, leadership position always lead to the conflicts and it would be much better if the children from the childhood, will learn how to communicate in different situation. Finally, I would like to give an advice and underline negative and positive sides of what could happen, in both, growth up without competition, and without cooperation. First of all, restriction of the competition might lead, to the loss of the aims. What makes us live, what gives us hope, that is the aim. The aim to be best of the best. The aim to create new music or to be the best actor, or even find a way to overcome cancer. Therefore, competition from the childhood give us necessary knowledges to become professional. On the other hand, the cooperation give us power and knowledge to exist in social society. Even, without making new friends, we always learn how to communicate with different persons. Therefore, as I think, you always have to have the balance between cooperation and competition. Yin and yang, makes our life to flow in the right way.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
The competition always was the main thing of the progress. Histori...
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Line 1, column 631, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... progress that is the real competition. While, ideas stilling is absolutely unaccepta...
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Line 1, column 992, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be always
...ord. For example, the people can't always be in zone of the comfort. They must get o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, i mean, i think, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74316939891 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85910391571 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516393442623 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3384878249 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.44 118.986275619 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.64 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944054620463 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254161174867 0.0831039109588 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345532770541 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944054620463 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 14.1392134831 58% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.62 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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