The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The task describes two different perspectives to develop young people for leadership roles in the government, industries and other fields. One approach is to create the sense of co-operation between them. Other way is to develop competitive nature among young people and that will help to bring the best out of them. I agree with first approach, which will be justified with some examples.
First, After completing their graduation, they enter into different roles in various fields. If we take the example of software industry, wonderful softwares applications are built by team work rather than the individual effort. It is impossible for a single person to develop a huge software like Windows operating system and it needs a lot of collaborative efforts to succeed. Setting Competitive mindset on the young people can create some problems, as they try to compete more with their team mates rather than working together with them to arrive at the solution. They tend to push their own solution more, even though there are better solutions proposed by other members of the team. Hence, it is very important to groom young people to be more co-operative in nature than competiting against each other.
Similarly, leadership roles in a government are very challenging and it needs interaction with a lot of people from various departments. Every department will have their domain experts and it is crucial to listen to their advice, as it comes out of long term experience with that particular field. No single individual can run a government successfully. So it is equally important to consider to all the suggestions coming out of other people and finally make a collective decision. This justifies the significance of the sense of cooperation than the competition. Young people with very competitive mindset tend to ignore others suggestions and make their own decision which will not often be the best for the government.
Finally, it is very tempting to think that creating competitive mindset among young people will tend to push their limits and become best. Competition has it's cons too. For example, if someone is not performing well compared to others, it creates peer pressure and they get demotivated. However they will be having some sort of genuine skills, which never comes out. Nobody is perfect on this world, even the most competitive people overlooks few important points, which could be spotted by less competitive people. Therefore it is essential to build sense of cooperation and respect for everyone to mold people for leadership roles in various fields.
In Conclusion, though youngsters are trained to be more competitive than others to be successful in their later parts of life, It doesnt help much to become future leaders. Developing the sense of cooperation among youngsters will make them more respectful and helps them to get along well with others, which will eventually make them as the best leaders
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...peer pressure and they get demotivated. However they will be having some sort of genuin...
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Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... be spotted by less competitive people. Therefore it is essential to build sense of coope...
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Line 9, column 131, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...essful in their later parts of life, It doesnt help much to become future leaders. Dev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, look, similarly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15240083507 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7898627704 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492693110647 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.351902578 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.833333333 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54166666667 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264997112526 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809259648254 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059272441777 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172536327236 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653841155074 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 288, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...peer pressure and they get demotivated. However they will be having some sort of genuin...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 517, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... be spotted by less competitive people. Therefore it is essential to build sense of coope...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 131, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...essful in their later parts of life, It doesnt help much to become future leaders. Dev...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, look, similarly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15240083507 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7898627704 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492693110647 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.351902578 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.833333333 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54166666667 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264997112526 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809259648254 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059272441777 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172536327236 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653841155074 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.