The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
There is a famous saying that “ the failure is the mother of the success” these failure and success will not happen if one is not independent. The prompt says that the cooperation is more essential than competition to be a good leader; however, I strongly disagree with this point of view. Undoubtedly, competition is important for successful leader but also to be a significant competitor is considerably crucial for such a sensative position for two reasons.
First of all, cooperation as a single criteria for leadership is not fair enough to prepare one to be a learder takes his own decisions and responsible for its consequences if those decisions are wrong. For example, if CEO of company wants to release a new product in a new market, in such situation although taking the others’ opinion is important, but the final decision would be from him because if this product does not achieve the desired sells, in this case, there should be someone is responsible for that mistake. The above example illustrates that the leadership somehow needs to a brave one as well as independent to be able to lead a big team or even a big company.
Further, competition is essential first then cooperation to prepare an excellent leader as most of the ivy league univeristies doing. For instance, when someone wants to study in such super universities, one of the most requirements for applicatuons is competition. If one wants to apply in for example Harvard univeristy; he should compete to be able to survive among hunderds and hunderdes of applicants. Therefore, the best front any one could face it to be rival to achieve the first step to be a leader. In such university first interests in competition to obtain the elite people who one day will be being prepared to be a senior or leader in a team to conduct a clinical trail or to operate a huge country like the president Opama; he was one of the grauduations of Harvard and prepared fair enough to be a president by the same method or technique form competition. Cooperation is essential but comes in the second step after one be mature enough and acquire a strong personality that leadership needs.
In conclusion, although coopeartion is important and should society take it into account, competition is more importance than it to produce a independent leader brave and able to lead a huge company or even a huge country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this failure' or 'these failures'?
Suggestion: this failure; these failures
...e failure is the mother of the success” these failure and success will not happen if one is n...
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Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'criterion'?
Suggestion: criterion
... First of all, cooperation as a single criteria for leadership is not fair enough to pr...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...f applicants. Therefore, the best front any one could face it to be rival to achieve t...
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Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... front any one could face it to be rival to achieve the first step to be a leader...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a one'.
Suggestion: who is a one
... competition to obtain the elite people who one day will be being prepared to be a seni...
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Line 4, column 141, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n is more importance than it to produce a independent leader brave and able to le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83863080685 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97252197987 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488997555012 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.9204706544 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.230769231 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4615384615 23.4991977007 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 5.21951772744 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151692288737 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625387755771 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454917540373 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939966292605 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038498122104 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.