Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one’s ability to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.
Travel has a significant role in cultivating the one, and no one can deny the essential value which travel can add to our lives. The prompt states two of standpoints that some people see how travel is vital in increasing our ability to relate to other people, and the others are not. I strongly agree with people who believe in the travel role in our lives, and how travel contributes to adding values as well as experience in our lives for two reasons.
Firstly, let's imagine a tree, of course, trees don't move and change its place for millions of years; thus, do you think how many ones saw that tree? and how many different climates or weather could be exposed compared to a bird or animals which can migrate from place to place. Of course, the answer will show a big difference between the two situations. Therefore, if we applied this paradigm on two individuals; one of them never travelled or contacted with the other globe, and another one is used to travelling abroad frequently. Undoubtedly, the individual who is travelling will gain plenty of knowledge as well as experience as he will discover other world and will be sure that there are other people' lives somewhere completely different than him. This example explains to what extent travel contributes to increasing the one's ability to contact and relate to the others who maybe differ than him.
Further, travel not only participates in enhancing the one's experience and making him relate to others but also shares in increasing the awareness and respect for others who are different. For example, if someone never travelled outside his place; he will not be able to understand that there are people who believe in and has another religion. However, that person who travelled to those people countries surely has the experience and esteem to their beliefs. Such traveller people have great respect for all different cultures, races and thoughts. Travel helps in acquiring more cultures and experience in how to deal with different people and even how to respect what they brace.
In conclusion, if one needs to increase his ability to connect and relate with others who differ from him, should travel to be able to see those people in their lives and will discover how they are like us and as corollary will increase and enhance his ability to contact with them as well as his homage for their difference.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83578431373 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53200272946 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475490196078 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3974060583 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.533333333 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.21951772744 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377664229351 0.243740707755 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134197901265 0.0831039109588 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731412540074 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249592583932 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275614964069 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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