Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time

Essay topics:

Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.

The prompt says that there are two kinds of teenagers, while some prefer to live with their families long time, the others want to be independent earlier. I believe that giving aldolescents a chance to live alone is better for three reasons.
First, to live alone away from the family, that gives the one more room to face the study alone and its hardshipes. For example, if that student has a weakness in specific subject and his or her teacher asked her to pay more attention for this weakness, she will totally rely on herself as no parents to ask them for help. She or he will search on interent to find out more about the topic,and thus will gain the confidence and enhance his self-education.
Second, after the study finishes, The work-life needs someone who independent to be able to deal with work committment. For instance, he or she must wake up early everyday having the breakfast then going to the work. What if there is no one to help her preparing the breakfast and being importune to wake up her? The answer is no one. Therefore, one of the benefits of living alone is being responsible for yourself.

Moreover,living away from the partents helpes in gaining experience in the dealing with the daily life's situations. For example, if that young adult works and have a little salary, what will happen if he or she spend most of her wages before the month ending? In case of being with the family, he or she inevitably will go to ask for help from her parents. However, if he living alone, he will try to find a solution and spend the rest of his salary sparingly. The above examples emphasize the importance of living alone when the one become a young adult, Gaining confidence, being responsible, and independent are the pay off of moving to different home living away from the parents.

Therefore, parents should encourage their children when they become ready for that, give them the chance and more space to face life obstacles by living in a separate home and depend on themselves. Separate home is not only separate in the place, but also in all life-responsabilites whether study, work, or the daily-life situations.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 390, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...nterent to find out more about the topic,and thus will gain the confidence and enhan...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a independent'.
Suggestion: who is a independent
...y finishes, The work-life needs someone who independent to be able to deal with work committmen...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to prepare' or 'prepare'.
Suggestion: to prepare; prepare
...rk. What if there is no one to help her preparing the breakfast and being importune to wa...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , living
...g responsible for yourself. Moreover,living away from the partents helpes in gainin...
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Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...e salary, what will happen if he or she spend most of her wages before the month endi...
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Line 7, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... only separate in the place, but also in all life-responsabilites whether study, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73066666667 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69009706558 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525333333333 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6765327883 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.352941176 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240956663355 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726677659307 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795825783995 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136946257632 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947336469114 0.0645574589148 147% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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