Some people believe that traveling to and living in numerous places increases one’s ability to relate and connect to other people. Others believe that this ability is better cultivated by living in one place and developing a deep understanding of that community.
Travel has a significant role in enlighting the one, and no one can deny the essential value which travelling can add to our lives. The prompt states two of standpoints that some people see how travelling is essential in increasing our ability to relate to other people, and the others are not. I strongly agree with those people who believe in the crucial role of travelling in our lives, and how travelling contributes to adding values as well as experience in our lives for two reasons.
Firstly, let's imagine a tree, of course, trees don't move and don't change its place for millions of years; thus, do you think how many ones saw that tree? And how many different climates or weather could be exposed compared to birds or animals which can migrate from place to place. Of course, the answer will show a big difference between the two situations. Therefore, if we applied this paradigm on two individuals; one of them never travelled or contacted with the other globe, and another one used to travel abroad frequently. Undoubtedly, the individual who is travelling will gain plenty of knowledge as well as experience as he will discover other world and will be sure that other different people live somewhere. This example explains to what extent travelling contributes to increasing the one's ability to contact and relate to the others who maybe differ than him.
Further, travelling not only participates in enhancing the one's experience and making him relate to others but also shares in increasing the awareness and respect for others who are different. For example, if someone never travelled outside his place; he will not be able to understand the other different people' existence who have other beliefs and religions. However, that person who travelled to those people' countries has the experience and esteem to their beliefs. Such traveller people have great respect for all different cultures, races and thoughts. Travel helps in acquiring more cultures and experience in how to deal with who differ from you and even how to respect what they embrace.
In conclusion, if one needs to increase his ability to connect and relate with others who differ from him, should travel to be able to see those people in their lives and will discover how they are like us and as corollary will increase and enhance his ability to contact with them as well as his homage for their difference.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: don't
... a tree, of course, trees dont move and dont change its place for millions of years;...
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Suggestion: many
...nk how many ones saw that tree? And how many different climates or weather could be exposed co...
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Line 3, column 634, Rule ID: IN_WHO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whom'?
Suggestion: whom
...ures and experience in how to deal with who differ from you and even how to respect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 406.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9039408867 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59857819845 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477832512315 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5301885918 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.733333333 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0666666667 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.21951772744 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360247438331 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131408136107 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775569718947 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239516263603 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286504409576 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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