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Students are more influenced by their teacher than by their friends

The prompt says that students are likely to be affected by their teachers more than their friends. However, I disagree with the prompt's statement for two reasons. First, students see themselves as rivals, which is not the case with their teachers as they see them as supervisors. Second, each student has interests that are compatible with the friends more than with the teachers. I will go deeply through each reason in the following essay.

To begin, students are usually the same age; and thus, they look at each other as competitors. This is best demonstrated by personal experience. Last year, My cousin quarreled with his brother to buy a high-brand cell phone, which was extremely expensive and wasn't suitable for their expenditures. However, my cousin insisted on buying it, although non of his teachers had that costly phone. My cousin's importune was for his feeling of competition with his friends as they have that phone. Therefore, buying the same phone put my cousin at the same level as his companion. Students always see themselves in a race; who will buy this first? Or who will be admired by this girl? Therefore, classmates influence each other more than be affected by their teachers.

Second, students always share the same interests, such as going out to have fun and eating out, and traveling from time to time. Usually, they have the same life patterns. For instance, if one has his car, the rest of the group will seek to have a car, even if that is not affordable for their families. Sharing interests will cause that everyone to look up to have what the others have. Upon my cousin's example, one day, he had an accident in his mothers' car. As time passed, we realized that the accident didn't occur by him, instead, by his friend, who was training to learn to drive to ride his mother's car too. Thus, the relationship between the classmates is more significant than their relationship with their teachers.

To sum up, I am of the opinion that teachers have no effect on the students. This is because they are not at the same age as the students or their interests. On the other hand, the students influence each other to cope with their interests, to the extent that they do unaffordable things that burden their families' shoulders.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'prompts'' or 'prompt's'?
Suggestion: prompts'; prompt's
...r friends. However, I disagree with the prompts statement for two reasons. First, stude...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...hone, which was extremely expensive and wasnt suitable for their expenditures. Howeve...
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Line 5, column 508, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...e passed, we realized that the accident didnt occur by him, instead, by his friend, w...
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Line 5, column 569, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...nstead, by his friend, who was training to learn to drive to ride his mothers car too. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, as for, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80306905371 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56068094158 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488491048593 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.0703673381 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.25 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2916666667 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358207867277 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104488730775 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134498418387 0.0737576698707 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258496400908 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.098272925112 0.0645574589148 152% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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