“The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership skills are one of the most sought after skills in the industry. Leadership qualities helps a person, to navigate him and his subordinates through tough and harsh times. Such skills demand a lot of patience and time to be honed and inculcated in a person. I mostly agree with the issue at hand and believe that cooperation is the more righteous path to develop leadership qualities and be adept at it.
Firstly, leadership skills require a person to be patient and carefully analyze overtly difficult situations. These situtaions could be varied from uncalled cancelling of deals from clients, to looming losses engulfing the company, leading to the companies profits declining. These situtaions, if not dealt with a sense of calmness and compusre could lead to detrimental results. In such perilous situations, leader requires cooperation of his subordinates to handle the situation appropriately. For example, if a leader is instilled with sense of cooperation he would take each of his colleagues views and then take a step which would benefit everyone in the present and future. This way, through the virtue of cooperation and team work, the leader is somewhat relieved of the huge risk and can take a balanced step to help everyone out.
Leadership skills are more prominent to be inculcated in person when he is around people who are like-minded and promote the same qualities as they do. A sense of competiton, most of the times, promotes a sense of negativity which might not help a student learn more about leadership, but more likely, lead away from it. For example, entrance exams for colleges which have a paucity of admission seats, promote so much competiton among students that they unknowingly develop a plethora of negative qualities such as jealousy, greed and stubbornness. These qualities hinder a person from becoming or developing leadership skills! On the other hand, if students share their work, do group studies and help their peers in solving questions and be kind to evry person, they would be able to instill many good moral values. These values will, indirectly, help develop good leadership qualities.
However, leadership skills cannot solely be attributed to cooperation, a sense of fair competition helps to keep the whole skill learning process competitive. In few cases, it can help the student develop more zeal and enthusiasm to prepare more for these exams . Although this occurs in lesser quantity, these cannot be neglected. Yet, just because a student is competitive, it is not a sufficient parameter to instill leadership skills.
Therefore, the moral value of cooperation helps a person to take apt and critical life-decisions in a more shrewd manner . This kind of development can only occur when the student has a positive atmosphere, where learning and good values are appreciated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20652173913 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88990221786 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519565217391 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8000537296 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.047619048 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52380952381 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14469561075 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437320017015 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0367680466652 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785152277467 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368322541321 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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