Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
I have always critically believed that independence from parents as soon as possible helps a child become more morally strong and independent. The independence comes with its own set of responsibilities which help the child transform from a reckless and unaware kid to a cognizant and strong-willed person. I believe in the indpendence of children from parents at young age and have two reaosns to justify my opinion.
Firstly, when a young adult becomes independent from his parents, he needs to understand the importance of money, shelter and all those things he had taken for granted while staying with his parents. For example, I had moved away from my home after my tenth grade to study for the engineering entrance exams for a period of two years. TInitially, this decision was very difficult but it made me realise how dependent I had become on my parents. The whole journey started with me washing utensils, clothes and cleaning the house every week. On addition to this, I had to pay rent to landlord and accomodate enough money to buy suppplements for cooking every day. The money management honed my analytical skills and I significantly ameliorated my time managment skills. It helped me become responsible for all my deeds and also inculcated in me, the important value of my parents in my life. All these skills helped me become a better human being and transformed my life completely.
Secondly, independence from parents takes a toll on your family life but helps you double your efforts on the work and improve your chances comprehensively to become the best at it. For instance, when I moved out of my house for my job in another part of the coutry, all my relationships with people such as friends, relatives and parents took a hit. As a family loving person it is incredibly tough to make such choices but this motivated me further to do well at my job. The resilience made me more confident to do supremely well and manage myself. All this effort culminated, and I got two promotions consecutively and was able to pay all my college and parents loans easily. If I had not left home, I would have been still struggling under the immense pressure of job and loan. Therefore, I believe becoming independent at a young age helped me change my mindset and concentrate on things which were of more importance.
I would like to conclude by saying that independence at young age comes with its own set of responsibilites and it is our choice on how we deal with it. Moreover, independence makes us stand out of the crowd, with the right skills developed, at a young age. With adequate dedication and hardwork, it helps you understand the struggles related to life and gives us enough time to become adept at it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: ON_ADDITION[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in'?
Suggestion: In
...thes and cleaning the house every week. On addition to this, I had to pay rent to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78012684989 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87570261551 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515856236786 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5528054833 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5238095238 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09523809524 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191545479376 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609247639354 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390742587899 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129619160618 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198388843508 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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