The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of co-operation not competition.
The author states that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of co-operation not competition but I am not fully convinced with the above issue. Though cooperation is an important trait for leadership but competition is the most important factor.
In the smartphone industry, currently there are lots of competition between Samsung and Apple as the best brand. Due to this, they compete with each other for producing most demanding smartphones. When one brand comes up with a new exciting feature than other brand in-turn also evolve their smartphone with that feature in-order to take on their rivals.
But, cooperation is also a key trait. Apple buys chips which are the primary component of any smartphone from Samsung. So, Samsung’s main source of earning is from Apple. If Apple stops buying chips from Samsung, then Samsung’s economy might be in danger. So, cooperation is also considered as an important factor to be a better leader.
Not only in industry but competition plays a vital role in government. There are lots of opposition party which acts as a competitor to ruling party. If the ruling party fails to fulfill some public demands than the opposition party will help the public in-turn which will help them to get the votes in next election. So, due to this competition there is always a fear in ruling party that if they failed to fulfilled the important public demands than their leadership will be under threat.
So, in last I would like to say that no matter in government or industry competition is vital trait for leadership but also cooperation plays an important role to be a better leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8904109589 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74483256976 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506849315068 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.7567910768 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.21951772744 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299933272707 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903017575637 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171997535122 0.0758088955206 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186333901199 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.225403746303 0.0667264976115 338% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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