The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Whether the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation instead of competition can be weighed in many aspects. However, not every young person shares the same personality that is suitable for cooperation, and not every case can be implemented with what the claim asserts.
Admittedly, the author's claim appears to have considerable merit. Cooperation indeed does help people advance within their field, and can help avoid some unnecessary conflicts or confrontations. Yet the author fails to provide a precise litmus test for "young people", or "people". When we discuss people in this kind of topic, the following can be put forth: Easy-going people, and contentious people. Obviously, the former will be more likely to cooperate with others while the latter do not.
It is thus justifiable to take both kinds of people into account, and we will find the statement problematic. Consider the contentious who dislike to cooperate or even work together with others. Asking them to cooperate with others may disgust them. If they are forced to cooperate with their fellow, we can already anticipate some negative consequential influence such as bad mood may emerge, and therefore affect or even hinder their working efficiency within their field. To this kind of person, cooperation may not be a priority over contention or competition.
Moreover, the author falsely assumes that two subjects can always be detached from each other. However, in many cases, cooperation and competition are blended. Many modern companies nowadays assign multiple managers within a single department. Those managers not only need to compete with each other about their working efficiency or effectiveness but also cooperate to make their department better than their counterparts within the same department. Furthermore, those competing departments also need to collaborate to fight against other companies within the same industry. In this case, we cannot discount the credit of either cooperation or competition.
In summary, the author's claim is not as persuasive as it stands. Although cooperation can help avoid some unnecessary confrontations, not all cases are the same. For people who are relatively contentious, asking them to cooperate may hinder their efficiency; if we insist to implement what the argument asserts, the result may backfire whatever the original intention or ambition of this claim is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 140, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'dislike cooperating'.
Suggestion: dislike cooperating
...oblematic. Consider the contentious who dislike to cooperate or even work together with others. Aski...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, while, in summary, kind of, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46428571429 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05297783772 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.3352593714 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.19047619048 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204490125085 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615781261873 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955867995015 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131874871664 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101568812998 0.0667264976115 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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