The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by intsilling in theme a sense of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by intsilling in theme a sense of cooperation not competition.

While some people believe that the best way to prepare young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them the sense of competion, not cooperation, I believe the contrary. Considering different conditions such as the envinronment which young people grow up and the general trend of the times, it can be cannot be concluded that competition does a better job than cooperation.

Firstly, the essentiality of cooperative learning cannot be over emphasized. It has been proven over time that students who work in groups (with collaborative efforts) tend to do well both academicaly and emotionally. This is because every student is given the opportunity to both contribute and learn from one another while working cooperatively. In fact, cooperation serves to produce not just better results but better people. In the light of preparing young people for leadership in industry in the future, it is clearly seen through history that no leadership role can truely be single-handedly managed by one person. Collaborative efforts is always required. Hence, the earlier the sense of cooperation is instilled in young people, the better, since this will only make the young ones well prepared for the future.

Secondly, one of the key factor of the mind-shaping is the environment where one grows up. People have interactions with one another daily. Hence, it is only natural that there are many uncontrollable influences on the development of young ones. As a matter of fact, for one to survive the envinronment, it is expedient that one gets used to cooperative interaction. Moreover, ranging from science to humanities, there is hardly any field where cooperative efforts is not needed for considerable progress. WIth this in view, it is clear that a considerable amount of progress will be recorded if young people are raised to be well adapted to a day to day cooperation with people surrounding them.

In addition, while competition seems essential in the development of ambition and the realization of progressive aspiration, it tends to leave young people with a generally biased mindset. Cases of emergenec of war has been recorded through history because some leaders had the sense of being better than either their citizens or their nation being superior. A good example of this was world war II, where a ruler, rekowned at that time developed an unprecedented hatered for another race of people, and ultimately starting a war that claimed the lives of million globally.

In conlusion,to have better societies, young people being raised for leadership in government, industry or other fields should be taught to be accustomed to cooperation and not competition.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, in addition, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2279.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23908045977 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05738138317 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510344827586 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2119570583 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.947368421 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8947368421 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306677706892 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923835527399 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102654979527 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194414574687 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0781763769008 0.0667264976115 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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