Leadership roles in today's society is a stressful job. It involves the role bearers to be capable of handling internal and external affairs and strifes. Internal affairs such as discontentment within the team etc. and external affairs such as satisfying stakeholders and promising results while drawing the resources necessary for a team to function. Both these situations require training and prior exposure to help the future leaders better handle. With this in mind, I somewhat agree that while cooperation is important, a powerful tool such as competition should not be dismissed easily for the following two reasons.
Cooperation is the act of the working together as a unit rather than individually to accomplish goals quickly and more efficiently. This requires the group to trust each other and understand each other at an individual level. Studies have shown that team work best, when they cover for each other and work in a similar fashion to a relay team in the olympics. Each of the runners are individual members of the team, they learn to trust the runner ahead to catch the baton without missing and pass it forward. Similarly, the runner ahead will learn to trust that the baton will reach him or her in time and cleanly. However, a leader leading the relay does not necessarily participate in the race, rather they guide from the sidelines - a coach. Runners trust each other during the race and they also trust the coach to have guided and supported them to be prepared for the race without worrying about any other complications. Hence, a leader is merely a torch bearer, pointing the way forward. This kind of attitude can be instilled better in young, future people by having them learn to cooperate.
A leader is an individual capable of making tough calls and working constantly in a stressed environment, balancing both internal and external affairs. A leader's role can be compared to that of a firefighter - both are putting out fires on the job, metaphorically in the case of the leader. This capacity to handle stressful situations must be grown in individuals overtime rather than abruptly, as it might cause them to breakdown. A comparison to this can be drawn to a soldier training for battle. It is said that a soldier typically in an army now-a-days spends most of their time training rather than being in combat and more so often, they are given real-life scenario training exercises. This helps them in fighting the nerves or fight or flight response that innately kicking into soldiers when they are dropped into real life combat situations.
Keeping training in mind, while not a tool fit for all cases, competition is widely regarded as one of the best forms of teaching to handle stressful scenarios. They induce anxiety, similar to a college student on test date or a person taking a job interview to progress his or her career. This tool called competition, while a little too much of it as well cause mental breakdown. It can be considered to be the whetstone in sharping swords - the swords being the students. Sharpened too much, it causes the swords to be brittle, sharpened too less, it makes the swords dull.
To sum, to develop young leaders, instilling a sense of cooperation helps them better learn to work with a team as their coach or guide and competition cannot be disregarded as it a effective tool to teach leaders to handle stressful situtations. However, similar to any tool, used too much or use too little, do not the yield the required results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, similarly, so, still, well, while, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2919.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 595.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90588235294 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93888872473 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71325952927 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484033613445 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 891.0 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7596957617 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.25 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120033076967 0.243740707755 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326481845643 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391203498348 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0671882505719 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281842843849 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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