The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling a sense of cooperation, not competition
Leadership is the ability of an individual to take the lead role and give proper guidiance to other people in the community. The controversy about the fact that government should prepare its young people for a leadership by instilling sense of cooperation and not competition has not being a trivial one has its has role in determining the economic situation. The prompt suggestion has several nuances that needs to be considered and it is imperative that competition should be instilled even though cooperation is also important. Therefore, I mostly disagree with the prompt for two reasons.
To begin with, it is important for government, industry or other fields to instill cooperation in order to prepare its young people for ledership in the sense that, cooperation brings about easy resolution of ideas and development of new ideas because people will be able to come to a reasonable conclusion in time. Take for instance, if there is a need to stop an act of robbery in an estate, and the people are trying to reduce the robbery by setting a certain time for the opening and closing of the gate to the estate, the most important factor to consider for such an act to be successful is for the people to cooperate and stay by the rules. If there is a situation where some people are feeling inferior about the rules and violate the rules, it might be impossible for such an act to be successfully done. Therefore, to prepare the young people for leadership, there must be an ethic of cooperation.
However, if cooperation is the only being considered without competition, how is it possible that there is always a best student in college? Also, why is there a need for a good GPA in order to secure a good job? The simple answer to this is that, there is a need for competition in order to ace well in life. For example, while we are in school, there is a price for the best of the class after every session which is the reason behind student being trying to come out the best and can be related to their competitive power to become the best and not just cooperation. The prize given to the student is a simple explanation of why competition is very important to be instilled in young people because it brings out their best quality.
Also, after a student graduate from college and need to face reality of life, the most important factor to consider and that can be used to access such student is the result he or she shows which is the GPA. Companies tend to chose students with the high GPA and this makes the level of competition higher in order to make a good leadership anywhere in life. Therefore if this is true, then it can be argues that competition needs to be instilled in young people for leadership in government.
In conclusion, it is important that competition need to be instilled in young people for leadership but only to the extent that it does not compromise the argument. As discussed above, competition need to be instilled in young people but but be accompanished by the fact that cooperation is also important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.5258426966 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2506.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 539.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64935064935 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75633799729 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397031539889 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.2986133829 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.222222222 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9444444444 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.4260065488 0.243740707755 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160138135865 0.0831039109588 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110888048288 0.0758088955206 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267399438884 0.150359130593 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0864108399411 0.0667264976115 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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