The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Leadership is the ability of an individual to control a set of people by giving directives and making decitions on importannt matters. It is imperative that in any society there must be a leader in other to have a peaceful society. The prompt suggests that the best way a society should prepare its young ones is to instill a sense of cooperation not competition in them. However, I mostly disagree with the prompt with two reasons but i do concede that cooperation should still be instilled in young people to prepare them for the role of a leader.
Firstly, there should be a sense of competition because it enables the society to get the best of the candidate in a gathering. Take for instance, during high school, why is there is need for giving prices to the best students? Apparently it is because competition helps to know the best student in the class. and this leads to a fair judgement. Also, after high school, grades are given to students to estimate their capacity and this is wat is used to judge their performance after college in order to secure jobs. If there is no competition and these grades are not been issued out, it might be difficult for the job examiner to actually estimate the ability of each candidate and this might lead to giving jobs to unqualified candidate. This also applies to leadership, if competition is not been mandated between the young people in the society, it might be difficult to choose the best one out of them.
Secondly, competition is needed in order to prepare young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields because it makes the young people put in their full effort and helps bring out the best out of them. This is because young people do not like to defeated and in the cause of knowing there is a price for any action being done well or bad, they end up giving their best effort and ensuring they are always th best. In doing this, it will enable the government or industry to actyally know the best person that suit in for the leadership role. For example, in a gathering of engineers where there is a need to pick a leader between them, the best way to choose the most suitable person is by giving them a timed task and estimate them according to their performance. These engineers fully aware they are competing for a posiition will outrightly do their best in order to win the position and this in-turn is beneficial for the industry because it enables them choose the best candidate of them. Therefore, competiton should be instilled in young people in order to prepare them for leadership in any field.
However, eventhough competition is very important in choosing a leader, the sense of cooperation cannot be shut down as it help in ensuring a peaceful society. If a society lacks the sense of cooperation there is a chance that such a society might not be able to survive successfully. For instance, if the people in the society only fight and never have peace, there is no way even the most reasonable idea can be communicated between these people. Conclusively, It is important that competition is very imperative to be instilled among young people but sense of cooperation should not be compromised.
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...prepare them for the role of a leader. Firstly, there should be a sense of comp...
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...lt to choose the best one out of them. Secondly, competition is needed in order...
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...f cooperation cannot be shut down as it help in ensuring a peaceful society. If a so...
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...it help in ensuring a peaceful society. If a society lacks the sense of cooperatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2631.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 561.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68983957219 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68230020389 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.395721925134 0.4932671777 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 847.8 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6678302766 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.285714286 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339978190383 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122112001236 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816175861101 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226932181056 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701372626843 0.0667264976115 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.