The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Our society flourishes, when supported by new developments and breakthroughs, and such a breakthrough could come under a great leader. A sense of cooperation will not only help in the development but also help for the betterment of oneself. I strongly agree with this suggestion that a sense of cooperation should be manifested inside people from a young age for leadership in government, industry, or other fields.

To begin with, the root of the development of any society depends on its leaders as they lead everyone towards a great future. All young people should have a sense of cooperation in them irrespective of they become leaders in the future or not. For instance, Bill Gates started coding when he was young and at 13 years of his age, he wrote software and hacked the only computer in his school. After that, he was appointed as the caretaker of the only computer they had. Getting a sense of becoming a leader and a sense of cooperation at a very young age helped him in starting his own software company known as Microsoft with the help of his friend Paul. Further, in the latter stages, he also becomes the richest person on the planet. Such achievements and breakthroughs only come when you start at an early stage.

In addition, having a sense of cooperation and not competition will not only help in having a leadership quality but will also have a greater impact on society which will make it a better place for everyone. For instance, a group of people working together as a team in any project will have a difference in ideas but having a sense of competition between them will not only affect their individual performance but will also have a similar effect on the entire project and in the worst case the project can also get disbanded. Having a sense of cooperation between them will not only improve their performance but will also help the project they are working on and in the best case, that project could be the biggest breakthrough of the century.

Of course, there is always a sense of competition to improve yourselves than others and be the better of yourself. However, such thinking can go to any extend and cause trouble for society in the future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...government, industry, or other fields. To begin with, the root of the developme...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1811.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72845953003 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73783415798 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462140992167 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2296573935 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.733333333 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5333333333 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209143992757 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745808982781 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520440170663 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134022960158 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302953617466 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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