The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
What should be the best characterisitcs of leaders of an industry or a government? Would the people and the infrastructure under the leaders prosper if they are of a competitive mind or if they are cooperative and empathize with the people they interact with? I believe that the best leaders should have a bit of both these characteristics and the society should prepare its future leaders accordingly instead of concentrating on one and neglecting the other. Eschewing the importance of one can have inadvertant effects.
The success and the growth of a field usually highly depends upon their corresponding leaders. The people working in the field look up to these leaders as role models and try to follow in their footsteps as well as justify their actions by giving examples of their leaders' actions. Hence, the leaders that take up these mantles should be groomed and prepared to be a good example. Thus, these leaders should be prepared to be competitive so as to have the willpower to work hard and take their industries/nations to levels never reached before. But they should also be trained to empathize and cooperate with people so that they do not resort illegal, improper means to achieve their goals.
Competitive mindset is an extremely good thing to have. It enables the person to push their limits to achieve what could have been considered impossible by themselves and the society. But the ways to achieve a goal is multifold and a person drunk on achieving their goal might resort to take up any of these ways without considering the moral implications. A leader with just this mindset might achieve pyrrhic victories by taking improper advantage of the people working for them and trust them. Eventually, these people might be left in the dust as the leader do not find themselves with the feelings of empathy or cooperation. A good example for this would be the CEO and founder of Amazon, Jeff Bezos. Jeff Bezos has achieved what was once considered improbable and his company has benefited people across the globe. But the way employees treated in Amazon is not widely acceptable as they are considered to be made to work hard with not even being paid accordingly. As, a result Jeff Bezos is not widely considered to be a role model in spite of his mind boggling achievements.
Secondly, just the presence of a empathy in a leader without a competitive mindset
would not be a boon either. A leader might empathize too much with their employees or subordinates without providing them with a proper goal to achieve and thus, not pushing them. As a result these people might become complacent and thus do not contribute much to the growth of the field and would just be content with maintaining the day to day tasks.
Thus, with the above viewpoints as evidence. I feel that the society must take extra care to prepare its younger generation to instill both senses of cooperation and competition. Only with both of their characterisitics can the leaders, people working for them or associate with them, the field/nation/industry they are working for will eventually prosper and grow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, as to, i feel, as a result, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 14.8657303371 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2552.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85171102662 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8272435781 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404942965779 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.2370786517 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 526.0 23.0359550562 2283% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 60.3974514979 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2552.0 118.986275619 2145% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 526.0 23.4991977007 2238% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 133.0 5.21951772744 2548% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.2758426966 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140047301237 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140047301237 0.0831039109588 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087018582416 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541201168596 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 264.4 14.1392134831 1870% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -453.95 48.8420337079 -929% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.92365168539 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 207.3 12.1743820225 1703% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.33 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 32.7 8.38706741573 390% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 11.8971910112 504% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 212.4 11.2143820225 1894% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 60.0 11.7820224719 509% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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