The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The prompt provided is apt in its statement which asserts that the best way possible to prepare the future leaders viz, the youth of today, in the government or any other field is through instilling a more cooperative sense rather than a competitive one. This is definitely a propitious advice due to a few reasons.
The youth of today, are vibrant and filled with a fresh outlook towards anything per say (as compared to those currently holding leadership positions today). When a sense of cooperation is instilled among them, a spirit of team work is also established. Team work has always proven to be productive. With the idea of cooperation and team work instilled in our young leaders, we would be able to nurture leaders who are open to various different opinions and hence, be able to create an amalgamation of all the ripe ideas they can produce in order to further ponder upon them and conclude on the most suitable approach. This approach would definitely help create successful leaders who are always ready to listen to their subordinates or anyone for that matter.
Well, competition is a way of life which simply can't be avoided. Be it among the plants or the animal kingdom. It is how the survival of humans has been established. Hence, one might argue that, a competitor is necessary to oppose the current candidate for a particular leadership position so as to portray a different perspective of the issue and bring about diversity in opinion. Agreed, however, in such situations, the candidates tend to become selfish and more focussed on their success and hence digress from the bigger picture. Instead, if the two candidates rather come together and further deliberate and debate on the best outcome to their problem in a healthy manner, would lead to a better coalesced and fruitful solution.
Hence, in conclusion, although I do realise that a competition is unavoidable to obtain leadership roles across various sectors, the sense of cooperation is surely necessary to be instilled among our young leaders in order to prepare them to become successful ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...best way possible to prepare the future leaders viz, the youth of today, in the governm...
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Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: PER_SE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'per se' (=by itself, by themselves)?
Suggestion: per se
...d with a fresh outlook towards anything per say as compared to those currently holding ...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...mpetition is a way of life which simply cant be avoided. Be it among the plants or t...
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Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...te for a particular leadership position so as to portray a different perspective of the ...
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Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy manner" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...te on the best outcome to their problem in a healthy manner, would lead to a better coalesced and f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, look, so, still, well, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98853868195 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79226912339 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56446991404 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.1090465368 60.3974514979 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.357142857 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9285714286 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203320765852 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593959209486 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731407646377 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133612588272 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057846444922 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.