Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the wellbeing of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Corporations and industries have been established with the fundamental thought of contributing to the economy along with making profits. Both aspects can be placed abreast for the corporations to prosper. Nevertheless, the corporations must be vigilant of the damages they can cause to the environment, if any. Since, the economy of the country and the wellbeing of its citizens are greatly affected by environmental concerns as well, negligence on the part of the corporations in this front cannot be accepted.
To begin with, I agree that the corporations were the result of a business idea. However, it is also about how much the business can contribute to the economy. As more the profits, more is the economy booming, and the citizens well satisfied. For example, if a pesticide corporation sells adulterated products to the farmers association in order to boost its business, which in turn results in respiratory problems among the consumers, the product would soon be defamed and the corporation lose its consumer base along with it's profits. Hence, the well being of the citizens cannot be and definitely should not be ignored if the corporations want to pursue their business.
Another reason that the corporations must be aware of the environmental impact that their processes cause is primarily because they must realise that the environment around us is the reason for our existence. If a corporation is filled with avarice for money, ignores the damage it causes to the surrounding environment, this will in turn harm the business itself. Consider a large multinational corporation daily releasing harmful chemicals into the nearby rivers. The release of the noxious chemicals would damage the ecosystem of the river and its surrounding plains. This in turn could have a detrimental impact on the villagers who consume this water downstream. Deaths of villagers due to the negligence of the corporation shall not be tolerated and the owner of the firm must be penalized. The business corporations hence cannot pursue their dream of a lucrative business if the process costs the lives of their very own people.
Hence, while I do understand that the primary reason for the business to be put up in the first place is a selfish need - profits, and that profits are necessary for that individual as well to feed his family, however, as the company grows and flourishes, the owner of the enterprise or corporation must also keep in mind the welfare of the people and environment around as well in order to
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the result of a business idea. However, it is also about how much the business c...
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Line 4, column 319, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'farmers'' or 'farmer's'?
Suggestion: farmers'; farmer's
...ation sells adulterated products to the farmers association in order to boost its busin...
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding environment'?
Suggestion: the surrounding environment
...rimarily because they must realise that the environment around us is the reason for our existence. If a c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, to begin with, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09903381643 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95624058518 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485507246377 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.5428482626 60.3974514979 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.176470588 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3529411765 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139581937982 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503625831094 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317505637272 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939078862599 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341002799567 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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