The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Leadership skills are one of the most important skills that an individual can possess. These leader skills should be meticulously nurtured in the children as they are the future of the nation. The author here asserts that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. I partially agree with the author. In order to develop effective leadership it should be mix of both competition and cooperation. Below are the reasons that I would put down to support my stand.
Firstly, cooperation is most important thing for proper functioning of anything. So cooperation is one key thing that should be instilled into young people. A government, industry or in other fields without the cooperation between leader and employess nothing would run smoothly. For instance, let us take an example of new person who has been appointed as CEO(Chief Executive Officer) in a xyz company.
Since he is new to the company it is important for this CEO to discuss with all the employess about the existing problems and existing products that are produced by company. To become cognizant of all the existing problem the CEO should carefully cooperate with employees by giving them enough freedom and assurance that their problems will be solved. Thus going further it is important for the same CEO to cooperate all other executives while taking important decisions. If the CEO is not willing to cooperate while taking decisions it may effect the whole company. Thus it is very important for any leader to cooperate with all other people
Secondly, competition is also very important for the leader. The competition keeps the people motivated and it always pushes the people to go for an extra mile. Without competition many leaders may perform at their min level. For instance, let us an example two leaders who are competing for a particular seat in next elections. Both of them should have competitive spirit so that they go that extra mile and proactively know the problems of people whom they are going to rule. If they don't have any competitive spirit they may not know work proactively to get elected and utlimately may fall short of leader position in the election. Thus competitive spirit is an important quality that a leader should possess.
Some may argue that, competition may motivate leaders to do some mal practices to win the elections. However, if they are comprising their integrity even before getting elected as leader they would eventually get exposed and they may never be able to become leaders again.
Some others may also argue that too much cooperation may lead to disagreement and eventually no final decision will be made about any given situation. It may be true that excessive cooperation would lead to contention. But disadvantages of the over cooperation are far less than the cooperation. For instance, in an industry any decision taken without cooperation may lead to disagreement and eventually company incur huge losses because of employees strike.
In conclusion, it is very important that, for a society to instill both sense of cooperation and competition in young peopel for them to become an effective leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'mixed', 'mixt'?
Suggestion: mixed; mixt
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...tives while taking important decisions. If the CEO is not willing to cooperate whi...
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 395.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97974683544 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7610215257 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475949367089 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8173872636 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356522153116 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0995962591892 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128282444462 0.0758088955206 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213740607209 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759579728566 0.0667264976115 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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