The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Undoubtedly, today's youth are the pillars for the future establishments to come. We certainly know that the power of the youth is unfathomably extravagant. But the premises here lack the pieces of evidence and that is what a virtuous decision might help in. According to my opinion, there are two sides to the particular issue.
The government gives the power to the citizen to bring an affirmative change in the society, but as history says it well, it involves a humongous amount of politics and pressure tactics. Competition to win the positions is one of the reasons why corruption and illegal activities have come into the picture. Taking the example of fake votes in parliament elections, citizens fall for earning money instead of choosing the virtuous leader.
Additionally, fields like that of engineering and medicine always have a limited amount of job openings and we often find a few who are the prey to nepotism. Junior employees tend to follow every right or wrong path that their managers and leads pave. It becomes a claustrophobic environment for them but still somehow survive for their daily pieces of bread. Cooperating and understanding that anyone can commit mistakes, learning from the past and guiding people to enhance personally and professionally is the ultimate goal.
Competition must be healthy and not a toxic one, be it any field, every human has equal rights and a true leader will always remember that. Young minds are pliable as clay and it is essential to mould them in such a manner that they think about the good of society.
They say "United we stand and divided we fall", it cannot be possible for a single citizen to instil this sense of cooperation among the team. It is undeniably the teamwork that can bring in the change.
Leadership qualities contain three major aspects: knowing the issues, patience to understand them and the perseverance to reach the goal. One person single-handedly can never do the same. We must make sure that whatever the outcome is, importance should be given to the journey and not the ultimate goal. Learning, empowering, having empathy and working for goodwill make sure that the leaders do great work in their tenure. However, Positive competition must be recognised as the one which further motivates the individual to excel in his or her varied skills.
Therefore cooperation and healthy competition are the keys to the success of any leader. And for the same undoubtedly, one must focus on the ultimate goal of human excellence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d professionally is the ultimate goal. Competition must be healthy and not a to...
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Line 7, column 2, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...to excel in his or her varied skills. Therefore cooperation and healthy competition are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, so, still, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02386634845 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83768976149 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582338902148 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3561571899 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.6818181818 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0454545455 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.81818181818 5.21951772744 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.97078651685 141% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149549148006 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361900204249 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328820443077 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0678814473957 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020701529867 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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