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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The claim made, favors a sense of cooperation and not competition to prepare young people in different fields for leadership skills. The claim makes direct comparison between cooperation and competition and makes cooperation skills stand out against competition. In my opinion, I disagree with the claim made and advocate for competitive skills for promoting leadership skills in youth for these reasons.
First of all, if there is no competition and just cooperation in any office or organisation, life would become as easy as cake walk. People will start relying upon others for their job as they would feel that their is always someone who would cooperate and get the job done. Life would become so easy and stable for any employee. But this is just opposite to the scenario of real world where there is stiff competition for anything. People have to fight to get even a meager job. There is so much competition out there in the real world so we must incorporate competitive sense in the youth as early as possible.
Further, competition gives birth to a real leader. Even a high school soccer team always has a captain who is mostly the best of all the players. People compete to become captain. Its a prestigious post which cannot be achieved just by cooperation skills rather one must be highly competitive and show that he or she is the best in the pack to be a leader. There is a difference between a player and a captain. Captain is the best of all players mostly. While others may be rested for a game or maybe even for a whole season, the captain is the one who has got no day off. He is always representating his team; be it in the game or off the field. So, leadership skills can be incorporated in someone by putting him or her in real competition and testing his competitive skills.
Examinations are also a way of competition only. Everyone studying the same corse, studies in the same class, from the same teacher but still exams are important as they are a way to tell and show everyone that this particular student is the best of all. Cooperation is seen in classroom as students may share their notes and all but in the end everything depends on the final examination which is the real competition. Many a times the topper is made the class representative or leader as he is believed to be more competent than others for the competitive post of a leader. Even right now I am writing this examination to show that I am competitive as I didn't shy away from GRE even though it has been waived off by some universtites. This will surely give me an edge over others who didn't give GRE as it will show my competitive skills.
Of course, some may argue that cooperation is better as it brings a sense of team work. But one must always remember that any team has a leader always if it wants something productive out of it as competition is really important in this modern world. One who is able to compete is the one who is having good leadership skills which is highly required in this competitive world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, still, while, of course, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 542.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57564575646 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71237793267 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429889298893 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6389982646 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8518518519 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0740740741 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.37037037037 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24245369911 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686879599268 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568330915813 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142235452596 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576557357972 0.0667264976115 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.38706741573 78% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, still, while, of course, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments