The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

Essay topics:

The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Today's world require everyone to be their best versions and competing with others definately keeps a check on the individual development. I disagree with the assertion made in the prompt that, the best way to prepare its young people for leadership is by inbibing in them a sense of co-operation instaead of competition. I believe that competition is an integral part of growth of an individual, specially in modern world due to the following three reasons.

Firstly, where there is no sense of competition, it is often observed that people lack motivation. For instance, government of the state of Delhi has recently changed marking system for student's academic tests till high school, from a percentage score to grading. The government as well as parents took this decision in an attempt to reduce pressure of competition among students to achieve perfect numbers as scores for their final exams. It was expected that through this change a positive outlook can be developed among students towards learning. On the other hand the results were astonishing. It was discovered though a survey that scores and the quality of learning both had a negative impact preceeding this change in marking system. Therefore, it was concluded that a sense of competition is necessary for all round development of an individual to grow towards becoming future leaders. Hence, governement should ensure that education is structured in a manner where children find themsleves yerning to be better then not only their peers but also their past selves.

Further, not just on indivudual level , but on organisation level, competition is extremely necessary to be on top of the charts. For example, in India during the early 2000s all the telecommunication networks were controlled by the government . Later in the 2010s a lot of the private companies entered in the Indian telecommunication market, and it was predected by most of the financial advisers that the private companies will charge more for the same servises provided at relatively low costs by the government. Although, it turned out exactly the opposite; due to increased compeition among various organisations in the sector, the prices exponentially dropped as more private players wanted to entice consumenrs towards using their services. Therefore, it is necessary to introduce some form of competition in every kind of industry to make people work their best.

Furthermore, in today's cut throat competition it is almost impossible to avoid competetion. Where most of the contries are developing plans to make their students and organisations more competitive to gain an edge: working towards intilling a sense of co-operation and not competition will make the entire contry fall behind. For instance, there are so many products launched in the world right now that any company which wants to be a global leader, if does not update their strategy from time to time then they are going to lack behind. Biggest example of this scenario is 'Nokia'. The company just did not stand up to the compeition with Android and had to sell almost all its shares. Theirfore, instead of avoiding competition we need to cherish and learn to work with it.

Some may argue that a sense of co-operation is required for every individual for working in a team and collectively achieve any type of goal be it in a personal setting or a leadership role in a corporate project. But is'nt that exactly why people need to be the best version of themselves all the time due to the increasing competition in all the professional arenas. Be it sports or politics, an individual who is not self sufficient and is too dependent on the people around due to a sense of co-operation instilled in them, often find themselves struggling to make things work and end up in dissapointment as people may not always co-operate or work in a team as par with the expected standards. In conclusion, it is inportant to inbibe healthy competition in children from an early age to develope them into all round future leaders.

Votes
Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
Essays by the user:

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the following three reasons. Firstly, where there is no sense of competition, ...
^^
Line 3, column 1015, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'better than'?
Suggestion: better than
... children find themsleves yerning to be better then not only their peers but also their pas...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1022, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...en find themsleves yerning to be better then not only their peers but also their pas...
^^^^
Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... Further, not just on indivudual level , but on organisation level, competition ...
^^
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...tworks were controlled by the government . Later in the 2010s a lot of the private...
^^
Line 7, column 540, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Biggest'.
Suggestion: The Biggest
...ime then they are going to lack behind. Biggest example of this scenario is Nokia. The ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
... and learn to work with it. Some may argue that a sense of co-operation is require...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ership role in a corporate project. But isnt that exactly why people need to be the ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 110.0 58.6224719101 188% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 12.9106741573 271% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3365.0 2235.4752809 151% => OK
No of words: 666.0 442.535393258 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05255255255 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08005667302 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97264946203 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 331.0 215.323595506 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496996996997 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 1062.0 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9107261311 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.423076923 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6153846154 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286837966855 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727633504718 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722801088076 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162998163235 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572582777337 0.0667264976115 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 100.480337079 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Write the essay in 30 minutes.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.