The best way to teach — whether as an educator, employer, or parent — is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Becoming a better person is an important thing for any person in any single institution or purpose, from educational or academic instistution, to profit-based entities like corporations. People are the core of those establishments; they are the driving power of the system toward a better future. Improving the people means enhancement of overall performance of the system, including in education as a primary place for people to learn. Advanced nations have good quality citizens that have been forged by better education system compared to developing countries. To become a better person is not only about improving something good insed the person. Clearly enough, the system also must prevent any unwanted things from the people, and in doing so they need to carefully assess the negative sides of each person in their system. The statement of ignoring the negative actions of the people might result in deleterious impact for the system, and there are some reasons why that is the more compelling case.
Teaching people to become better ones needs complete examination of every aspect of the people that correlates with the teaching target of each institution. Some organizations like schools or even small families absolutely want their younger peers to not only have enough skills and knowledges, but also behave in accordance to the accepted norms and rules. Take a excellent student as an example. The student might have great academic ability proved by his or her scores on all tests given, and praising this is clearly a good and thing. However, that same student might have some bad behaviors that are dangerous for his or her friends or for the future. He or she might like to steal or be rude to other people, and if we do not mitigate this behavior, then we will produce rude young people to the community. Another apple-to-apple example also can be made from the overall academic reports of the student. For example, he or she can have outstanding physical skills in sports that deserve to be rewarded, yet he or she might be left behind in core science skill like mathematic or general knowledge. If those knowledges ignored, the student will face difficulties in his or her career in the future, or closely for their college years or higher education experiences. These examples are sufficient to prove that we can not avoid the obligation to evaluate all sides of people that we teach, including the negative sides that must be remedied before negative consequences arise.
The emphasis of praising only the positive sides of any learners might also have unseen effects for the community. Asian countries are notorious for their industrious and excellent academic teachings, and they produce many amazing scientists and researchers in this era. On the other hand, some these countries are also famous for individuality and social detachment that can be detrimental to the very system in the end. These countries are profusing with technological products, yet nowadays they are facing social problems that might render their future gloomy, take Japan and Korean for example. The hard system of their education may produce the best quality of intellectuals, yet they are also producing a lot of people who can not stand the pressure of life in the future. Neglecting the mental health of the people may cause losses for these countries in the long run because they will have high rate of mortality of productive generations. Another problem is unwillingness of their people to have family will render their future in the dark. These problems are the result of the teaching system that only cares about what people generally glorify, yet they neglect the need of social comfort of the people.
Praising the learners for their achievement is indeed important to boost their confidence and motivation. This method is effective to grow the people more in their learning, as people want to further improve themselves in the fields that they like. However, negative sides indeed are still important to be nullified to achieve maximum education for the people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 364, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e to the accepted norms and rules. Take a excellent student as an example. The st...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'tests'' or 'test's'?
Suggestion: tests'; test's
...lity proved by his or her scores on all tests given, and praising this is clearly a g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3412.0 2235.4752809 153% => OK
No of words: 669.0 442.535393258 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10014947683 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08576781939 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70049577351 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 215.323595506 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448430493274 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1094.4 704.065955056 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8335504797 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.857142857 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8928571429 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.71428571429 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0641587194308 0.243740707755 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215838380715 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0234151937338 0.0758088955206 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0431908137648 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00975244950665 0.0667264976115 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 100.480337079 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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