Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The extant of climate change has been growingly devastating toward all aspects of our life in this century. Moreover, many scientists believe that with the current rate of global temperature increase and the devastation of the natural habitat, mainly toward annihilation of the trees as a major component of our ecosystem, we can not reverse the damage using the degree of efforts that we have provided so far. The earth has reached its critical point where the natural ecosystem itself can no longer tolerate the pollution and physical destructions, so we need a much greater effort than what we do right now. The statement of the importance of natural protection law in the future is one of the effective measure to enhance our effort in combating the climate change. Indeed, there will be some implications if we want to implement that kind of law in the long run.
Currently, the deforestation in our forest has reached a rather alarming speed, and with the acceleration of repurposing of the forests into economical objects, like the fields for agriculture or open-pit mining sites, we will lose the majority of the earth’s “lung” capacity and the impact will be severe for our future. The temperature will increase more dramatically, the sea level will rise further, and, in return, the economic cost of the devastations will be unbearable for our descendants. Imposing the law on the wilderness protection can stop the deforestation, or, at least, it will impede the commercialization activites on our forests. All nations’ governments must find a way to protect the natural ecosystem while they manage to continue economical activities within their respective jurisdictions. Another way to harness the resource from the forests can still be done; for example, the manufacturing of papers and other wood-based products can take the trees from any legal industrial forest, or the scientists can produce an alternative material to replace woods. By the time this law is implemented, the government has the opportunity to reassess the condition of all the forests. They will be forced to think innovatively to make sure that all industries’ needs can be fulfilled by using alternative methods or materials, and this probability is great for the advancement in our technology. Furthermore, the environmental activists and organizations will have time to replenish our forests and return them to the initial condition when the forests’ capacity can take the burden of all the humans’ emissions.
Likewise, the animals and plants species also play many important role in humans life, so protecting them is the best way to protect our future from unwanted consequences of the natural destructions. Industrial activities on unproper forested lands will decrease the living area of the animals and plants. Sometimes, some of these creatures can not withstand the change and they will begin to disappear. Consequently, the balance of the ecosystem is disrupted, and it will cause grave danger to the people around the initially forested lands. For instance, disease will appear when the animals that spread the disease are increasing in number due to the decline of their predators. Another possible impact of destruction of forest is the wild animals can come to the villages near the deforested lands and they can cause harm to the people. These unwanted impacts should definitely be prevented by imposing the strict wilderness protection law so we can maintain the equilibrium of the natural ecosystem. We will avoid further spending in solving the impacts rather than preventing them in the first place.
Economical activities are still important to lift many people out of the poverty line, yet we can no longer compromise the earth to fulfill this needs. We must find other solution to replace the sourcings of our economical activities, from the forests, to other materials or technologies. A century ago, we might think that the earth can still bear the pollution and damages that we inflict upon the earth. However, now we must change before it is too late.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 754, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...ecosystem while they manage to continue economical activities within their respective juri...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: Economic
... preventing them in the first place. Economical activities are still important to lift ...
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Line 7, column 213, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...olution to replace the sourcings of our economical activities, from the forests, to other ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, likewise, moreover, so, still, while, at least, for example, for instance, kind of, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 34.0 12.4196629213 274% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3429.0 2235.4752809 153% => OK
No of words: 660.0 442.535393258 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19545454545 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.06857624559 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96723576118 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 325.0 215.323595506 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492424242424 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1082.7 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.4366355422 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.16 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105511843831 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0337977834273 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03208414868 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621772756691 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361001710641 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 176.0 100.480337079 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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