Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
A role model is a person that someone else looks to as a good example. A society must make a role model so that people could see what things are appreciated and can align to good habits. The prompt here recommends that the best way to judge a society is by looking at their role model’s or hero’s character. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the suggestion and argue that heroes and role models show a society’s real values. The below two paragraphs will cast light on my perspective with an apt example.
To begin with, role models or heroes tell us what kinds of people are included in society and what are their mindsets? To illustrate, let us look at the example of a scenario where a society’s role model is a man who is a popular political leader but always threatens people to support him. Instead of making a women role model, who won a medal in the Olympics? Just because society thinks that women are not capable of that position and not worthy of that appreciation.
Furthermore, role models or heroes show what traits are appreciated by society and what everyone wants to become in the future. Consider the example of a country where soldiers and doctors are given more importance than movie actors or singers because they sacrifice a lot for the country and its people and they want more people to go into this profession.
Of course, some people claim that role models or heroes cannot reflect the character of the whole society because there is the possibility of the presence of people who are against society and indulge in some bad work. For instance, many poor people believe that to become a role model they first need money so that they can get an education. And to get the money they get involved in scamming or robbery etc. In my opinion, role models affect a person’s core values and if the role models are good then the character of the society will also be nice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 311, Rule ID: WOMAN_WOMEN[1]
Message: 'woman' is the singular form of 'women'. Consider using 'woman'?
Suggestion: woman
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, so, then, for instance, of course, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 342.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57602339181 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4522054947 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497076023392 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7476701002 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.333333333 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.93333333333 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395649690485 0.243740707755 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150091733325 0.0831039109588 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940926038595 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250153071951 0.150359130593 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665765278521 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.