Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The statement bridges the character of a society with the character of the heroes of its people’s choice. Of course, almost every society features a few role models who, at least so said the stories, sparkle invaluable qualities that win over its people’s reverence, or even worship. The best way to understand the character of a society, however, is through its heroes or its role models.
Indeed, heroes and role models do reveal a society’s highest ideals, such as free of bloodshed, violence, and suffering. Spiderman, for instance, has been a superhero known to generations of Americans. There have been many movies about his heroic doings, and being a movie itself allows for more room for the plot to be idealized, thus allowing the protagonist to radiate his characters with minimal hindrance. Apart from being a typical high school student – curious, energetic, sometimes naïve – Spiderman has so many times risked his life saving innocent and vulnerable people from the evil and helped eradicate wickedness. In one of his movies, the villain destroys the bridge a train full of passengers is about to cross. In the absence of any other aid, Spiderman rushes past the train, attaches himself to the nearby buildings with a few threads of elastic gossamer, and risks his life to stop the train with his body and the elastic force pulling him in the opposite direction of the train’s motion. Sure enough, Spiderman once again creates a miracle that earns people’s exclamation and respect. From Spiderman, one can notice his boldness, resourcefulness, and self-sacrifice.
Renowned for liberty and independence, Americans as a nation has been a pioneer in individualism. Spiderman’s characters, while precious, fails to represent this principle feature that any history class would not neglect. Actually, self-sacrifice is also one of the lofty virtues that eastern society calls for. For example, Shaoyun Qiu, was said to voluntarily be burned to death for common good. Ordered to set up an ambush near the enemy’s fortress, Qiu lurked in the grass with his platoon. Unfortunately, the enemy threw a firebomb beside him and lit a fire. Instead of rolling into the stream inches away to put out the fire on his body, he chose to stay put in order to veil the operation and burned to death. His sacrifice protected his platoon and gave rise to the victory of the battle. His somewhat disturbing story, has been passed down generations after generations to promulgate this heroic behavior. Interestingly, self-sacrifice, a quality prorogated by China where collectivism prevails, is also found in American society where individualism dominates.
Such contrast in social ideology and the parallel of the quality in both heroes suggest that the approach to understanding the character advocated by the prompt is not all that flawless. Surely, we can glimpse the character of a society through its heroes or role models, but they tend to display the paramount qualities that its people long for, or the uniqueness nearly unfound elsewhere. To say they serve as the best indicator of the people’s character would therefore be misleading.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, at least, for example, for instance, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2675.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23483365949 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03488120733 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579256360078 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4793538875 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.458333333 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2916666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274807018584 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826386748418 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125995413523 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222106821584 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165380227679 0.0667264976115 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.