Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Heroes and role models play a critical role in society due to their ability to influence the beliefs and actions of others. In order to gain public attention, the qualities portrayed by these notable authorities must certainly be valued and respected by a portion of the population. However, it is difficult to believe that the dynamic disposition of an entire society can be captured by a small group of heroes and role models. The tendency of heroes and role models to be extremely subjective and highly specialized prevents them from accurately representing the mosaic of ideals embodied by a complete society.
A society encompasses individuals of all ages, genders, races, ethnicities, sexualities, religions, political beliefs, and so on. Furthermore, each member of society develops their own unique set of values based on their background, interests, and personal experiences. As a result of these differences, individuals can significantly vary in the amount of worth they assign to certain role models and their corresponding characteristics. For example, political candidates are frequently recognized and applauded for their leadership skills, personality traits, and political perspectives. Nevertheless, politicians have never been able to successfully unite, portray, and protect all the ideals crafted by an entire society. Moreover, the need for multiple political parties proves that a single political role model cannot equally represent the contrasting opinions found within such a broad demographic of people. Thus, examining the character of a particular politician elected by a society would not be the best way to understand all the beliefs and ideals upheld by its members.
In addition to being highly subjective, the messages illustrated by various heroes and role models usually emphasize one or two qualities that appeal to a specific group of like-minded individuals. While the characteristics personified by professional athletes, prominent artists, award-wining actors, and other types of role models are valuable, they do not sufficiently represent the multifaceted ideals needed to construct and maintain a functional society. For instance, the determination and dedication embodied by an Olympic gold-medalist likely inspires many young athletes to practice and improve their skills. Although this high level of determination is very admirable, it may not be the most important factor contributing to the regular operations of a particular, all-inclusive society. Therefore, evaluating the character of role models praised by a narrow subset of the population also omits many other fundamental attributes prioritized by society as a whole.
In conclusion, examining the character of role models selected by society is not the best way to understand the ideals upheld by that society for several reasons. Firstly, role models often represent beliefs upheld by only a fraction of the entire population. This becomes evident when analyzing the impact certain political figures have upon society. Secondly, it is impossible for role models to display all the characteristics respected by an entire society. Instead, role models provide important guidance to other people with similar interests by demonstrating one or two key qualities. Overall, the character of a society should be studied by examining many factors, including governmental systems, cultural traditions, class structures, and so on.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2933.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 513.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71734892788 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24298871161 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53216374269 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 947.7 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6204567317 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.318181818 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3181818182 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 5.21951772744 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307454656194 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941418934338 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985535253891 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200946035998 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538656189658 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.8420337079 64% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.1639044944 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.35 8.38706741573 123% => OK
difficult_words: 181.0 100.480337079 180% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.