Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
A society or a group of homogeneous people often exhibit characteristics or traits that are reminiscent of people that they consider role models. These characteristics of a society are also the result of cultural upbringing or religious dogmas that they follow. The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the women and men they choose as heroes or role models. The reason behind such a claim is that heroes and role models reveal the society's highest ideals. I dis-agree with such a statement since such a claim is too narrow to encompass all the living beings. The reasoning behind my position will be explained in brief in the paragraphs below.
As mentioned in the aforementioned paragraph, a character of a society is often characterized by the religious dogmas and the principles that they adhere to. Few years back, it was prohibited for the Muslim ladies to drive cars in the middle east. It was a cultural taboo that dissuaded Muslim women from stepping out of the house without a "Burkha", let alone drive a car. Such cultural practices and orthodox mindset gives an outsider a glimpse about the conventional character of the Muslim society. They do not necessarily idolize a hero or a role model but the features of their society is driven by their religious beliefs. Such an example refutes the claim, that to understand the character of a society, we have to look towards the character of the role models that the society follows.
Sometimes, it is not even the cultural restrictions that characterize a society. The propensity of individuals to fraternize with their fellow peers and the way they acknowledge them tells a lot about the people in a society. It can be due to the environment of their upbringing which cultivates certain traits unique to a particular society. For example, the people of Canada are thought to be the most amenable individuals of the world. They are known for their accepting nature and minimal racial discrimination. Such a trait is partly due to the calm and simplistic nature of the whole country which dissuades a brusque attitude towards new immigrants. Once again, it refutes that claim that heroes and role models of a society have an effect on their character.
Proponents of the above claim can relent by stating that Mahatma Gandhi and Nelson Mandela were among the many revolutionary people who have an effect on people and motivates them to revolt against any wrongdoing which they encounter. I do not dis-agree with such a claim, but the emphasis of a society's character solly as a result of the character of it's heroes or role models seems a very narrow consideration.
In sum, I dis-agree with the claim that the best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the women and men they choose as heroes or role models. Such an approach will often times lead to misinterpretation of the society's character. There are other aspects that are also a representation of the society's character and a holistic view is advisable when the characteristics of a society are studied.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 477, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'societys the highest'.
Suggestion: societys the highest
... that heroes and role models reveal the societys highest ideals. I dis-agree with such a stateme...
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Line 3, column 340, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... from stepping out of the house without a 'Burkha', let alone drive a c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, so, for example, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 528.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91856060606 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99935367139 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416666666667 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 837.0 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7954794108 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.208333333 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.29166666667 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.44053617883 0.243740707755 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138255221131 0.0831039109588 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168761183999 0.0758088955206 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282736224794 0.150359130593 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126169574342 0.0667264976115 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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