Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis
should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
This topic raise the aurgument that young people should advice to picking worthy goals rather then following there dreams as many people’s dreams are inherently selfish. Indisputably, this aurgument holds its position when one human dreams is to achieve something which colud be selfish on his part. However, generalizing that dreams are always selfish would be wrong. There are perhaps some instances like dreams to become Doctor, Community pharmacist or to achieve white collar jobs etc are not selfish. Thus, I generally disagree with the author’s opinion of dreams being selfish in nature and would argue that dreams can be driven by noble causes or could make human capable for contribution towards noble cause like humanwelfare etc.
First of all, humans are consider most evolved species in kingdom Animalia due to there intelligence to think, analyzed and act accordingly. Dreaming is one of the ability of human’s mind where he/she desire to achieve something . To translate his/here intelligible dream in to reality human set a goal. Take for an example, Mr Warran buffet since form his childhood he dreamed to become world’s highest investor. In order to do so he set a goal of investing in the age of 18 as his first investment. Years of his persistant efforts and determination has made him the world’s biggest investor. Can Mr Warran buffet’s dream conclude as selfish or can goal be consider more worthy.
Furthermore, dreams does not necesserily containt beneficial nature for others but can make person capable in futher. Mr Warran buffet’s investment dream has be expanded to bolster some underpreveliged science projects promising for healthcare.On the other hand, some dreams has aiding nature for others such as Professor/scientist Dr. Xane zoye at MIT-Bioengineering department dream to design space pills for astronauts as alternative to general medication, more compliant in space enviroment. Mr Elon Musk SpaceX project for mars exploration as remedie for earth over population in future. School teachers inspiring hundred of student to dream or support to achieve their dreams.
While, this essay propounds that human dreams are to most extent has benefical nature may be in direct or indirect way for others. According to this view, some might aruge that why world is not completely a better place with such selfless dreams?.However human are under diversified nature of beliefs, thinking and surrounding. Consider, radical islamic dreams are based on terrorism and distructions of humans. This dream has consume many innocent lives, distruction of entire families,countries and cause to build long term horror and haterate in the mind of humans.
In conclusion , dreams do give purpose to life thus goals are articulated accordingly (like kite with string). Although dreams encompass selfless nature, one might not ignore dreams can cause distruction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...wards noble cause like humanwelfare etc. First of all, humans are consider most e...
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...ot ignore dreams can cause distruction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2453.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 453.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41501103753 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98241515301 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591611479029 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.8912140277 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.09090909091 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299169838744 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944616199916 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103199467201 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16587439291 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939114154207 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.