Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The given prompt claims that governments should provide financial support to the major cities because it's in these cities that nation's cultural traditions are preserved. I strongly disagree with the claim and the reason that supports it and argue that government should instead look for more sustainable solutions because of the following reasons.
First of all, it is important to note that various cultural traditions of a country which cannot found in cities are still being preserved in rural areas. For instance, In India farming has been an extremely crucial part of the Indian heritage. Although in recent times this activity has been restricted only to the rural areas, as a result many cultural traditions related to farming such as the festivals celebrating the harvest season are only celebrated in the rural areas these days. This example illustrates that various cultural traditions absent in the cities are still being preserved in the rural areas and as a result proves the reason supporting the claim wrong.
Further instead of making the major cities dependent on the governments for financial support, the government should aim to make these cities independent. The government should look for methods which make these cities generate enough revenue to not only sustain themselves but also help the government. This is extremely important because if the government keeps on funding it's major cities then who will fund the government? The government itself depends on the income generated in these major cities because they are the centers of economic and political growth and use these funds to run the whole country. Therefore the government instead of treating these cities as liabilities should instead strive to make them income generating assets.
Some might argue that people from all over the country are present in the cities and therefor financially supporting the cities is the best way to preserve cultural traditions of a country. These opponents should note that these areas have become "major cities" because they are economic hubs of the country and are capable of supporting themselves. Apart from this in the metropolitan environment of these cities although people from different parts of the country might bring some of their regional traditions with them but it is naive to assume that these traditions won't be "diluted" because of the "city culture" as a result a large portion of these traditions are still present in the rural areas. As a result, the government should look after these areas as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, still, then, therefore, well, apart from, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2172.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29756097561 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74152851238 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446341463415 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0364608133 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.8 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300567595257 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130086278552 0.0831039109588 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081965036939 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205869230904 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467936953766 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.