Q6. Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state,even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Earth is home to countless species which vary drastically. Some may be as small as a microbe and others might be as big as an elephant. The given prompt recommends that that all the countries around the world should pass strict laws in order to preserve the wilderness in their natural state. I strongly agree with this policy and argue that humans should rise above their selfish interests and think about other living beings with which we share the Earth with because of the following two reasons.
First of all, it is important to note that it is far easier to change the location of an economic centre than it is to transfer the biodiversity of a wilderness area. For instance, suppose a company is planning to open a factory in a jungle which is near a mineral ore. The jungle is home to various living species which depend on the jungle not for all of their needs. It is illustrated from this example that it is a lot easier for the company to open the factory at some place else without destroying the jungle by spending more money on the transportation of the raw materials than it is to transfer the huge biodiversity of the jungle to some other area. And as a result the government should force the companies to look for alternate ways of economic activities to flourish without disrupting the wilderness in their natural state.
Further, many animals require very specific environmental conditions in order to survive, and dislocating them from their natural habitat could lead to their extinction. For instance, we know that polar bears need an extremely cold environment to survive and dislocating them from these areas would lead to their perishment. It is important to note from this example that the wilderness that exists in a region exists there for a reason, and it is best to preserve them in their natural state because not doing so might lead to various animals being wiped off from the face of the earth.
Some might argue that the economy of a country might take a hit by passing such laws to preserve wilderness. These opponents should realise that humans are not the sole species living on earth and as a result it is their duty to not exploit the planet every chance they get, and look out for the species with whom they share the earth with. Therefore, the government should try their best to preserve the wilderness at their natural state even if it means taking an economic hit
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, look, may, so, therefore, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 425.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69176470588 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52215100157 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449411764706 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5142533778 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.933333333 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281827799687 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989512288558 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501371408373 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169530360394 0.150359130593 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00603366034419 0.0667264976115 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.