People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is a widely known fact that you can tell about a person from how they treat others. The given prompt claims that a person's behavior is largely determined by factors that are not in his/her control. I mostly agree with the given prompt and argue that a person's behavior is determined majorly by various factors that are not in their control because of the following reasons.
A newborn baby is like a wet clay, the parents can shape their child's future any way they wish. A person's behavior depends a lot on their upbringing and the circumstances they grew up in. Various studies have shown that children who are raised in violent and abusive households tend to be more violent when they grow up as compared to children who were born in a supportive household. As the kind of household a person is born in and the nature of their parents is not in their control, it can be said a major factor determining a person's behavior is not in their hand.
Further, apart from their upbringing, a person's behavior is also determined by the kind of opportunities they have and the kind of people they interact with while growing up. For instance, suppose a child is born in a society where the practice of discrimination on the basis of caste is extremely prevelant. The child while growing up sees his elders discriminating against those whom they consider of the "lower" caste, and as a result considers this treatment as "normal". It is highly probable that when this child grows up to become an adult, he will still continue the practice of discrimination because he considers them as "normal". As one cannot control in what society they are brought up in, this example illustrates that many uncontrollable forces together determine a person's behaviour.
Although it might be true that many factors determining one's behavior might not be in their control, a person can still overcome these factors because how one treats other is not only dependent on their upbringing but also on their conscience. For instance, we can look at the life of one of the most famous freedom fighter in South Africa's history Nelson Mandela. Throughout his childhood he faced extreme discrimination on the basis of race by the britishers. He was not allowed to sit in bus, entry at various restaurants and he was even jailed when he tried to speak up. It would have been easy for him to hate the britishers like many of his peers but he never once bore ill-will towards them. This is evident from the fact that when South Africa gained independence and he became the president, he was one of the most vocal supporter of black and white south africans working together to build up the nation. This example illustrates that despite extreme conditions a person might grow up in, it is possible for them to take charge and shape their behavior, however as we know the number of such noble people is extremely low.
Human brain is an extremely complex organ and as a result deriving a general maxim which governs the working of all the human brains around the world is an impossible task. This said, it is still possible to come up with an axiom which is true for the majority of the cases. Therefore in conclusion, it can be said that indeed many uncontrollable factors determine behavior of most of the humans around the globe.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... others. The given prompt claims that a persons behavior is largely determined by facto...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...heir childs future any way they wish. A persons behavior depends a lot on their upbring...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...t be true that many factors determining ones behavior might not be in their control,...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... is true for the majority of the cases. Therefore in conclusion, it can be said that inde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 33.0505617978 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2761.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 579.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76856649396 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80301462942 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452504317789 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 864.0 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.25172934 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.5 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3181818182 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137437879793 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448771469924 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358686312913 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841866431534 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308037015461 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.