Claim Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive Reason It is primarily in cities that a nation s cultural traditions are preserved and generated Write a response in which you discuss the ext

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

One of the major challenges to present modern society is preservation of native cultural traditions which is slowly being eclipsed by contemporary belief and so-called modern views of people. The prompt focuses on this problem but limits its view only to the major city areas. I mostly disagree with the claim and the reason presented above and present two case where the claim is significantly not valid. However, I concede that in certain circumstances the claim is good and the reason it has presented is true.

It is obvious that the traditions are not only limited in the major cities and providing financial support to the major cities only cannot comprehensively preserve these ancient traditions. For example, focusing attention only on major cities like Delhi, Mumbai, Chennai by the government of India opaque its view to Ayodhya, the birthplace of Lord Ram who is one of the sacred characters of Hindu religion. The traditions and cultural heritage of city area must also be preserved. But keeping these city areas in primary list is totally gibberish. Support by the government including the financial support must not be determined by how major the city is but by where the tradition is being endangered. The places where tradition is in verge of extinct must receive primary support from central body.

Also, we call a city major because it is sophisticated in terms of infrastructures and it has a strong economy. To preserve the tradition the heritage site the city independently can fund itself and does not require so much primary attention from the central government. The part of the country which requires and eye of the government is the bucolic areas where the tax rates are low and economy of the part is not good. These pastoral areas have the limited fund for them to run daily administration and cannot direct toward preserving of the tradition; when government becomes a patron to these areas economically it becomes much easier for the local body for conducting activities that preserves the local tradition.

Nevertheless, some major cities of the country are considered as important because of the tradition and heritage site located there. So, government must support these cities to preserve what makes them crucial otherwise they will lose their importance. For example, Mecca Medina of Saudi Arabia is famous for Muslims all around the world. It is an important pilgrimage site of Muslims. Saudi government must surely allocate a large fund to this city for its cleaning, renovation of old construction, management of visitors and also to support holy people who have devoted themselves to the place. Preservation of these important places and support to them must be a first in order priority of the government of the country.

Finally, it can be concluded that economical support to preserve the tradition must not be determined by how major a city is but by the status of tradition of a certain place is and the significance of the tradition not only to the country but the world.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 35, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...y. Finally, it can be concluded that economical support to preserve the tradition must ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 502.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04183266932 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82877293506 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442231075697 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.0 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.1819529903 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.523809524 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9047619048 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33857626457 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109989906022 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068402761363 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196592450772 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645982035216 0.0667264976115 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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